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Lost Without You

I've become like a wilted rose
longing for the rays of the sun
in a zestless winter

 

I still yearn the return
of the one whom I dearly miss
This insatiable heart
longs to see
the day when she might return to me

 

She was the marrow of my heart
the essence of my soul
who brought forth a ray of light
the aura
that illuminated my path

 

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  • jul
    April 2

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    Felt this before. Good job! Excellent as always. Thanks for sharing.


  • Alyzeh
    November 11, 2008

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    Sweet. The words used were simple, the imagery was brilliant, again the feel was sad..but nevertheless an excellent write that touched my soul immediately.


  • chilali
    November 5, 2008

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    I've read this before and I loved it! Hahaha. Congrats on the Silver. I am so bookmarking this right now and adding it to my favorites by favorites list once I've created it. Well done.


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    September 26, 2008

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    Well Done! Congrats on your Silver trophy! Enjoyed this thoughtful read.



    Dennis

  • chiefmac
    September 26, 2008

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    Wonderful use poetic craft in this. The images are clear and leave the reader caught to look at desires who long to see. Great line-She is the marrow of my heart. The read is absorbed by the heart. Great read.


  • Gwenevere
    September 26, 2008

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    Beautiful poem that is so full of imagery.I love zestless winter.You make the reader feel your longing in this short but eloquent verse, Ros


  • Sandygram silver member
    September 26, 2008

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    You have penned a beautiful poem with such lovely imagery. A delight to read. Great write. Thank you for entering my contest. Best of luck. Take care. Sandy


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 24, 2008
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    rhyming

    a very lovely piece of poetry here, good luck in this contest
    Linda


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    September 23, 2008

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    bleed and bleed your romantic need
    purging is a good thing

    good luck with the contest I liked zestless winter


  • chilali
    September 23, 2008
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    Very touching! Wilted rose, zestless winter, insatiable heart! I love the words used! This poem was filled with warmth, love and simplicity and it was just perfect!


  • Angelflower
    September 20, 2008

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    aww this was really beautiful hun, the longing in this write was really heartfelt and brought tears to my eyes.. But don't worry, that girl will return to you one day.. Best of luck hun..


    Angel


    • Ken-Maverick
      September 21, 2008
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      Sorry Jetleena, didnt mean to bring tears,
      That girl is long gone no-matter how much i wish her return


  • albymyheart gold member
    September 20, 2008

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    Lovely use of language to covey your longing thoughts. The rose wilted from the deprivation of her light, seen through a cold winter. Very nice...alby


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    September 20, 2008
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    This is a poem rich with feeling and emotional depth. Very nicely written. Best of luck in the contest.

    Dennis


  • alivefromlove
    September 20, 2008

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    this is a very nice poem my friend. simple, yet powerful in its emotion. GREAT job, and good luck in the contest


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    September 20, 2008

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    Amazing

    Such profound love, brillant write Ken.
    Good luck in your Contest, your passion shows through

    Blessings your biggest fan and laugh Partner

    Rend


    • Ken-Maverick
      September 20, 2008
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      Thanks again Rend
      This passion that shines radiates no longer.
      Just fruitless are my attempt


  • twEYElitedream
    September 20, 2008

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    As always its perfect. I like how its just simple and to the point. and its also heartfelt without being too over bearing. great job!! Its always nice to have a quote to go on and a picture to inspire.

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