Tender
traces of wings
glow before bemused eyes
Promising love will soon adorn
this fragile jilted heart
No more shall I
hunger
for passions touch
I surrender myself
unto the cradle of desire
waiting for that one kiss
to set me free
Caress
my soul gently
as though it's woven silk
Ignore all else and be consumed
by intense emotions
'til morning light
devours
Cold shivers flow
over nervous tendrils
still twitching in ecstasy's palm
Such poetic theatre
inside a dream
sublime
To you dear nymph
accept my grattitude
for building faith to love anew
despite my wilted brow
This soul's at peace
fly on
Author notes
Form: Behrquain Swirl (created by Arkbear) notes for which can be found on contest page.
Image Prompt: appearing top of page provided by contest host.
Artist: Friess Benjamin
In a list
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XXXVI - by Bear by Arkbear.
1000 points, ended October 19, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Formed poetry contest by Luciferschild.
650 points, ended March 1, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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interesting form and very well written poem, if you have time send me a message showing me how to write one of these.
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for this form you'd have to check the notes for it found on the page of Arkbear, as he was the one who created it. thanks for the comment, glad you enjoyed.
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Another fantastic message wrapped up in a gorgeous Form.....your aesthetics are nearly spot-on.....your 1st Swirl is perfect in shape.......others are a tad off in Form, but yes, what a lovley entry......good luck & God bless you!
Bear ~
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Thank you so much for the challenge to write this and for the HM, I am truly greatful you enjoyed the content.
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The title just supports the picture prompt for this challenge. As the introduction sets the atmosphere as you draw my attention to the place you want my thoughts to be. There is much emotional tenderness which you draw to a close in the beauty of your ending.
Thank you for the pleasure of this nicely constructed poem. Good luck in the contest.....this poetic form always presents well on the page a credit to Arkbear.
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thank you so much for your honest feedback, glad you enjoyed the thoughts I put forward here.
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Simply outstanding! I feel a relief of longing with the strength to leap ahead through love's door. So beautifully penned from this picture and the form is flawless!
Once again, outstanding piece!
Jazzy
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This is gorgeous, Cuz!
What a beautiful form created by my Bro Bear...I love every tender line of this....!
You amaze me and I am so proud of your talent and versatility...
Lynda
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