The whether man was optimistic
So, we thought we'd take a picnic
By the sea to while the hours
Unperturbed by threatened showers
But the onset of gales which no one reported
Meant that our picnic was sadly aborted
For it isn't so inviting, eating home made apple pies
When the chill north wind is biting
And there's a desert in your eyes
It was obviously futile to persist
This pandemonium picnic must desist
So we fled the raging sandstorm from afar
But it's hard to carve a chicken in a car.
Well, we pegged down the wind break, with all of our might
But soon it was riding the skies like a kite
So we chased it with haste for a mile down the beach
But the wind was so strong, it blew quite out of reach
It was obviously futile to persist
This pandemonium picnic must desist
So we fled the raging sandstorm from afar
But it's hard to carve a chicken in a car
The children of course, ignoring the storm
Stripped to their vests
And claimed to be warm
Then they paddled in rock pools as all children do
Despite our protest that their hands would turn blue
It was obviously futile to persist
This pandemonium picnic must desist
But next time we'll head for a hamburger bar
It's hard to carve a chicken in a car.
For Stephen and the children with love, precious memories
Gold trophy winner
Adding your comment:
this is a great poem for the prompt! I really like the imagery and the set-up of this poem - and the only thing that I would suggest changing is the third line of one of the repeat stanzas so that they are all different (you have 'So we fled the raging sandstorm from afar' twice, and then change it to 'But next time we'll head for a hamburger bar' - I'd like to see it unique each time) - but that is just my preference 
. Your rhymes were really good =D not just run of the mill cat-hat, simple rhymes, but well thought out ones, and at the same time, not rhymes that looked like you picked random words from the AP rhymey thingy 
