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The Dark Night

 

 

I’d heard it said that Batman’s dead

And Robin’s gone astray

I had some clue that this was true

Real men don’t dress that way

They’d scale the heights whilst dressed in tights

Like Romeo on a tryst

With cape and belt, I’d often felt

That they were limp of wrist

When dire strait and Pearly gate

Would seem to come to pass

You’d hear a clang from batarang

“We’ve come to save your arse” 

My mental strife: To save my life

Yet suffer pillow’s bite?

I take a breath, I choose my death

And jump into the night

 With parallax and senses lax

I land, within three feet

The alcohol had had its toll

Just a picture on the street

I just can’t please, this new disease

That’s taking up my time

Just my luck, so why the heck

Are my thoughts all couched in rhyme?

 

 

 

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  • DeathLight
    March 20
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    Utter trash

    Seriously dude, are you still a 7 yr. old mind in a 60 yr. old body or what ?

    • Topaz135 gold member
      March 20
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      I worry about people who use the word 'dude' in conversation,still you probably think that talking/writing like a 15yr old is better huh?

  • poetmaster32
    March 1
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    very well done

  • just mercedes gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Congratulations on the trophy - such a world-weary tone to this poem, and the rhyme and flow is wonderful. You made me laugh, with admiration.


  • MariGoes gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    don't trust men who wear tights!
    ha, this made me laugh, the poem not the tights


  • ViolentSerenity
    September 30, 2008
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    nice i like it good write

  • blondeoverblue
    September 27, 2008
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    I do love this type of street art, so darn clever! And predictably your words fit the picture perfectly, I wouldn't expect anything less from a wordsmith of your caliber, I'm fed up of poems like cryptic crosswords, you're my vernacular super hero

    Kat


    • Topaz135 gold member
      September 27, 2008
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      Oi! Leave my vernaculars alone...........[sigh]

  • polly filla
    September 26, 2008
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    heeheeheehee

    brilliant AND excellent!


  • Empty.On.The.Inside
    September 20, 2008
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    Fantastic, is pretty much all I can say!

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