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Hollow Ground



Wandering child
lost in mask emotions,
 

          ~where bleeding roses
            fall on broken hearts.

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  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    This made me sigh at the end, the sad beauty of this piece is superb, and the metaphor even more so. Best to you in the contest


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 20, 2008

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    Very powerful words here, laced with such profound sorrow. Beautifully penned. Good luck in your contest

    Like the background to..wicked!


  • myrataal silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    Strong metaphoric poem ...

    linked by assonance and emotional references. Concise, poignant and sorrow-filled.

    Love
    Myra