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Manor of the Dammed

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Dedicated to the scared!

 

It was the all time 'forbidden place',
Not for those who could not keep pace...

An eerie dark and haunted ambiance abound,
Many a wailing ghostly unrested sound...

Lost I wandered to its door,
On that lonely desolate moor...

Wanting sustenance and warm,
Not a night to have a qua-rm...

The moon was sultry in the night sky,
As I came by the manor wondering why...

It was never seen in the daytime hours,
Who knows what lies inside and thus devours...

Is this a mind reality and not really here,
Why was it invisible and now its so near?

I was soon trapped inside,
For doomed eternity I now must reside...

I died you see upon the moor,
I got here passing through deaths door...

I am no longer of the living,
Death sure has no real forgiving...

Lost in eternity in this mansion of doom,
Some one said they had reserved my room...

Creatures you would not wish to meet,
Soon appeared before me and came to greet...

I felt a sickly pain within my soul and heart,
I very quickly wanted to turn tail and depart...

But I was now a prisoner in this ghoulish place,
Not the sort of venue you might say was ace!

Slithers of beings that once walked the earth plane,
Passed me by in the corridors of eternal shame...

Some ghouls minus heads and others with tails,
Oh those deafening ghostly moaning wails...

The deafening infernal din of the dead,
Is this just a nightmare in my head?

No I am afraid I really died,
All alone and no one cried..

I reside now in the manor that only appears to the dead,
Where sickening infernal damnation has sadly bred...

Oh if anyone could describe hell it would be here,
Where you live your days in eternal and increasing fear.

Haunted by the tormented unrested souls and damned,
There is no escape once that door has slammed.

No more you can return to the former light,
Once at the eerie manor on the moors on your fatal night.



Copyright:K:September 2008

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Allpoetry.com Contest
September 2008
Darkest Darkest Dear.....
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2421493
Hey there all!!!! this is Jane again
That's my second contest so far, I want the best of you this
time, I mean really the very best, THE DARKEST!!!
Be inspired by the picture above, be creative, and most
important of all be original.
The rules are the same you already know
mind the spelling and mistakes
No erotica please and no dull emotions
No prewrites, don't go and copy an old poem of yours, put
our nick in your author notes so i can find out if you just
do.
I have put some of my dark poems for you to read, just to
have an idea about my style, they are not prompts, just for
chilling out from pressure, it's not an exam!!!!!
I may not be able to comment on your poems right away,
because I'm busy at university, but I will comment on them
all as soon as I can, and I will comment on them all, no
exception..
Have fun, and bring me your darkest, I will add points if
there are very interesting entries, or many of them, let's
take it to 1000 points, I will if you dare me!
Now good luck, and again ,have fun

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  • Janenroses
    September 20, 2008

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    You've said it all!

    Gosh I enjoyed your poem, the whole of it, it flowed greatly, I didn't get bored reading it, I didn't even notice it was long only when I visualized the whole of it. Your poem was very original and interesting, full of anguish and pain, some times while reading it I felt like the words were bleeding and screaming, excellent choice of words and images. I like when you figured your self dead, it shacked the whole poem, it feels so creepy to know that the teller here is dead, and we are hearing from a ghost!!! wooooooo! Great job, I can tell you already that your poem is a favorite, you have a good chance for gold. Thank you for entering, it was a great pleasure.


    • Kazytc silver member
      September 20, 2008
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      Wow Thanks millions!

      Wow! Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
      Glad you liked it. I wanted to create a feeling of "Am I dead or aren't I... an unrested tormented uncertain questioning of the horrors of being there".
      Its a great honour to enter your wonderful contest thanks for the privalege and experience.
      Best of luck in all of your contests, hope you win Gold in them all.
      Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
      Kaz.
      Kazytc xx


      • Janenroses
        September 20, 2008
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        You're very much welcome, the honor was mine. Best regards, Jane.