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Glazed

I wish I could transpose
into silent ghostly form,
then I could dwell in half-shadows,
smiling from semi-circles of light.

I would dance along to sirens
keeping the time to pedestrians' steps;
slinking along in their silhouettes. 
Whilst hungrily gulping evening air.

I then retire to my flower bed,
while sunrise would have me wake.
Always ensuring restoration come morn'
for we don't want weeds in our bed.

I could live like this forever
thriving in my own deviance.



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  • Symphony
    April 20
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    "
    I would dance along to sirens
    keeping the time to pedestrians' steps;
    slinking along in their silhouettes.
    Whilst hungrily gulping evening air. "

    That was so marvelously descriptive, I was half-hanging my mouth open reading it, how beautiful - so eager and hungry yet ... magical at the same time.

    Thanks for entering


  • MemeMassacre
    April 18
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    very beautiful awesome job very outstanding write


  • Reanna Eryn
    March 15

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    Beautiful. "Thriving n my own deviance" is my favorite line! It could be more discriptive, but this is beautiful! Good luck in the contest.


  • Lady Michaella
    February 14

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    thsi is awesome! very well written, and exciting. i love this alot. great work !!

    thanks for entering! and best of luck in the contest!!

    Your Co-Judge,
    -Lemon Bee-
    xx


  • HereComesTheSun
    February 9

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    Positive: your word choice was brilliant and really strung together a beautiful necklace of a poem that really clings to the reader. emotion was well shows

    Negative: i wasn't absolutely sure what you were talking about

    thanks for entering


  • LunaAmara
    February 1

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    This is really great! The images are deep and wonderful and I like the overall tone! Great work!
    Good luck!


  • leander Moderators member
    November 30, 2008

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    I really like the line that you don't want weeds in your bed... somehow that triggered quite some fantastic scenery actually!
    thank you for entering the contest!
    Leander


  • Anu-Nataraj
    November 27, 2008

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    I APPRECIATE U FOLLOWING THE RULES FRIEND !
    NOT MANY DO THAT AROUND HERE !

    BUT IM CONFUSED ABOUT WHAT U WANTED TOSAY TO ME THROUGH THIS POEM....DO U MIND EXPLAINING

    AMAZING WRITE !

    GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST AND LIFE !


  • vampireblood
    November 10, 2008

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    This was a beautiful write. I enjoyed reading it. It had great imagery as well. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.

    Vampy

  • headintheclouds
    October 30, 2008
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    How perrrfect. Good write ! ! ! ! ! thanks for entering my contest ! ! ! ! ! Keep writing ! ! ! ! ! GOOD LUCK!!

  • ElectricBloom
    October 17, 2008

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    Wow,
    this is beautiful.
    Excellent write.
    You evoke some powerful imagery.
    I love the starting lines they drew me into the poem :

    I wish I could transpose
    into silent ghostly form,

    I wish I could do that too.
    Beautiful.

    ElectricBloom


  • ProudMomma
    October 17, 2008
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    this was beautifully written


  • SouthernDownpour
    October 13, 2008

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    Well I have to admit its not what i thought it would be about. lol Nice supprise. to bad u cant be a ghost tho. stuck in meesly human form lol. Good write n good luck =]

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