Give back the boys of long ago,
when hunger killed
and panic flowed.
Lay down the guns
that stole our sons
and blow the pipes, then beat the drums.
With tattered pride
and bloodied hearts,
they gave their lives and stole the march.
So, freedom cost
a princely sum,
they stood and faced the faceless ones.
A childhood friend,
a schoolboy dare,
they fought together... everywhere.
A mother's son,
a wife's sweet one,
felt the weight of death's embrace... now done.
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Very much my 100% favourite out of all entries I've read so far in this contest; you had enough knowledge to back up what you were writing about, and, as a result, told the story of the lives of many from years ago in ireland
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Whoa, that was carefully measured meter- read aloud, there's not a hitch. Also for me, you hit the bullseye on Cannon's request. Feels like an open wound. Uncommonly good.
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You are very kind..
Many thanks 
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This said a lot! And I like the way it "flowed" almost like to a drum beat. A wonderful write. It did me good to read this. Well done.
Slayer
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Thank you for your kindness, as always, very much appreciated
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Brilliant!!!
Thank you for sharing your awesome poem, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!!! Peace, Cyn
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Thank you Cyn
Delighted that you enjoyed it
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The rhythm and rhyme here is stellar, and the poem sings to me. Very patriotic, and such a tribute to those who have sacrificed their lives, come home torn...for our liberties!
Excellent! Lyrical! I wish you well in the Comp.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Thank you Renee, delighted that you enjoyed it
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This is so strong, the patriotism in this is palpable and it fits the song so very well. dia dhuit ma chara slan C
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Thank you for your kindness Slan
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Very good dipiction of
the song.
d.
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed it
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Hello Lynne, This is really a good poem. I truly enjoyed it my friend.
Damon
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Aw..Damon, it is good to see you again my friend Thank you for your kindness and I am delighted you enjoyed the poem
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Gal
You have penned a gem here. Just a wonderful piece of poetry with a heartfelt message. Oh so good.
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Thank you Bob, you were a bit quick and commented before I managed to edit, but I am pleased you understood the message
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