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As We Make A Wish

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Listen to the whisper of the breeze among the dunes
as we sit upon the softest, whitest sand,
the grasses sigh while singing to the quietest of tunes
and the shadows play as darkness covers land.

You put your arms around me as we share uncertain dreams
and we watch the sunset grace the evening sky,
we’re lost in thought completely while we’re kissed by silver beams
as the day is done the earth gives out a sigh.

The gulls that wheel above our heads return to land once more
riding high upon the currents of warm air,
the cool waves gently lapping as we lay upon the shore
and I feel the warmth of kisses on my hair.

We hold each other tightly as unspoken words are lost
and our kisses fan the flames of true loves fire,
we make love ’neath the moon as all our inhibitions tossed
and passions burn us up with our desire.

The stars provide a cover that is dark and inky black
as they sprinkle us with all their magic powers,
and when we’re far apart we’ll have a smile as we think back
while we wish upon the star we named as ours.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Thomas Scott gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    Wonderful imagery and flow.
    Such soft words. Amazing.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 22, 2008
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    Just lovely!! Sigh.. makes me wish to be in such a moment!


  • Quill
    September 21, 2008
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    Beautiful imagery as always, Craig x


  • Wolfdog silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.

  • peacemaker
    September 20, 2008
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    That is really good poetry! I love it.


  • ogene
    September 20, 2008

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    WOW

    someone get me a handkerchief....

    I'm so teary eyed already... I wish everyone could experience love the way you write.
    whispers of the breezes... making love beneath the moon..
    these are like my fairy tale dreams...
    I hope they come true...
    BEAUTIFUL.


  • kkatie55
    September 20, 2008

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    You put your arms around me as we share uncertain dreams
    and we watch the sunset grace the evening sky,
    we’re lost in thought completely while we’re kissed by silver beams
    as the day is done the earth gives out a sigh.

    this is so movingly good ...it makes me want to try love again ...the dream of how it will feel marvelous and dreamy ...and the whole world sighs ...I love that thought ...you painted a wonderful canvas of words ...peace Katie


  • Gwenevere
    September 20, 2008
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    Simply beautiful.There is nothing more to be said, Ros


  • moonbumps silver member
    September 20, 2008
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    EXceptional write - I am sent- completely....
    Hilly xxx


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    September 19, 2008

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    you are a wonderful poet sue. ''from here to eternity'' revisited in your words. great. keep writing, for me x


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    September 19, 2008

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    This is so lovely!!! Sue you are marvelous!! You have the most beautiful writes!! Each amazing in its own way!!! I love it all each and everyone!! They are all so very special!!! I love it!!


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 19, 2008

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    This is a lovely poem Sue. I believe that somewhere there is a very lucky man who gets to enjoye these thoughts with you.

    Great job.

    Mike


  • just mercedes gold member
    September 19, 2008

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    Beautiful imagery that evokes timelessness, and the connection that exists between lovers even when they are apart. Makes me see love as universal, passion as the impulse of stars.


  • Tyl3r
    September 19, 2008
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    If only everyone else had your kind of love.

  • Many Sparrows
    September 19, 2008

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    hopelessly romantic

    What else can I say? You're blessed to be so in love and so at peace. If only everyone could experience such bliss.


  • Sunshine Always
    September 19, 2008

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    What can I say Sue. Beautiful, so very beautiful. The imagery here would reach the coldest heart. A wonderful write...mal

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