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Can You Hear Me Now? 09x11x08

I tried to talk to you
but you just shoved me off.
So then I tried to call
but you didn't care at all.
And then I wrote you a letter
because I really had something
to say.
You never replied to me,
I don't even think you read it
and one day you'll regret it.

They tried to talk to you
but you wouldn't answer the door.
They called you on the phone
but you just let it go.
They sent you a letter and
I know you never read it.

Finally you decided that it might
be important.

You tried to talk to me but I
couldn't answer the door.
So then you tried to call
but I couldn't reach the phone.
And then you replied to my letter
but I couldn't write you back.

You can find me hanging limply
though, beside my shirts and
my pants.

So, what do you think?

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  • Blooming Poet
    September 20, 2008

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    WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY

    The hints of suicide really sadden me, it made me wish I could help. But the fact that you hinted it instead of flat out coming out and saying I hung myself or cut myself or etc. This is quite sad. Not much I can give in advice.

    molly
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    • writex
      September 20, 2008
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      Well it was meant to be sad.
      Thank you :]