Dawn creeps quiet
'Cross the fields
Beyond the trees
A guilty blush
Lights the sky
As she passes
For her eyes
Veiled in ink
Saw it all.
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u ended this with a bang. this entire piece came to me like a piece of art
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Really good write.
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Very nice. This one made me smile. I saw the dawn lighting up the autumn leaves when I woke up this morning. You captured that vision well.
Great job.
Mike
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bravo
A most interesting and highly poetical take on dawn! An excellent and superb poem! bravo... bravo...
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That's why ugly people shouldn't do things and fall asleep in the park. You wake up to mow the grass and you can only wish that Dawn had woke these people up.
Enjoyed your short poem Daisy.
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The images this poem creates are very vivid. I wonder, though, what you mean by her eyes veiled in ink. But otherwise a very strong poem. The personification is very well done. Dawn sounds like a blushing bride. =]
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I liked the personification of Dawn and especially the guilty blush. Neat.
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wow, the imagery is so powerful and i truly enjoyed reading this. i really enjoyed the 2nd verse so well done on the great write
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