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the flood -GOLD/HM






I want to be
a petty mark
upon your cleanness,

that you just can't


scratch away.






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Have I gone too far to get home?


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  • Swan song gold member
    October 5, 2008
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    LOL excellent


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 20, 2008

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    I like this, though not sure that cleanness fits entirely with the flow but a grand poem. Best to you in the contest

  • Judith Chandler
    September 19, 2008

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    So this particular bird is one of those too, too clean creatures that calls out not to perfect. I've met people like that, so annoying.


  • Harlequin Dance
    September 19, 2008

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    Simple, yet effective. Is it supposed to be cleanness or cleanliness? And sorry, I'm being nitpicky right now.


    • Lj-
      September 19, 2008
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      No, 'cleanness' is intended.

      Thank you.


  • ScarsFade
    September 19, 2008

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    Wow....i love it....it's diabolically simple and amazingly awesome i love when someone comes up with something i could have never thought of in a million years....WONDERFUL....keep writing you have a gift there....scars.

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