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Caught in a Collission of Dream and Reality

Emotionally, I feel like a head-on colission
Useless for my self-destructive indecisions
I don't know which way to go
Speed ahead or take it slow
Run away or keep coming back
Open up my fists or just attack
I just don't know

My heart's on fire, soul burning up
Lungs full of ash, mind out of touch
With the world surrounding me
Blinded without eyes to see
Deaf but I still hear your words
Beautiful and so absurd
I wish I had never heard

I'll give this life if you'll to take it back
You can shove it up your fucking ass
Dreams have this aweful tendency
Of bleeding into painful actuality
I don't give a shit if it's all fake
I'll close my eyes and never wake
It's all I can do to stop the collission

Author notes

First stanza explain reason for the collission

First line is another way of saying an emotional wreck

 

Second stanza is a physical representation of the collission

 

Third stanza is meant to bring it all together

 

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  • MissyYates gold member
    October 14, 2008

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    LOVE IT!!

    This is deffinately one of my favorites! It is laid out perfectly and extremely well writen. I can't give you one favorite part cause I like the whole damn thing!


  • RestlessDreamer
    September 20, 2008
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    Wow, this sounds very similar to a poem I wrote titled My Eternal Dream. Your writing style is a bit different but the message and story seem the same to me. You wrote this beautifully and did a wonderful job expressing your feelings! I really like the second stanza the best. It is written perfectly. Great job!


  • moonsail silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    I think this is a really creative piece, I really liked the first verse the way you gave physical symptoms to emotional turmoil really worked, I could picture your heart battered and bruised, I could imagine someone whose em,motions had suffered a sustained attack. I also really liked the second verse, the way you implyed that emotional turmoil had left you unable to function in any real sense. Thanks for a really diverse read. Maybe you could check out mine on shameless. I really respect this work, and would value your opinion thaanks, aa=nd if your poem was from personal experience I hope the sun shines again fior you soon God bless