You took my breath away
Then never gave it back
Soon muscles gave way
And these lungs collapse
How can I breathe
When my faith is disbelief
And all I believe deceives?
In breathless silence I grief
An oxidizing, aging trouble
Tears only create more rust
Until you burst my bubble
Dissipating atmosphere of trust
Rusted red of rage
I lay stranded on this strange Mars
Void of us
Alienated in your cage
My Venus
Stranded amidst scattered stars
You turned my world
Upside down
And shook it violently
Scrupulous little girl
Without solid ground
I am cast into space apathetically
Myriad and twinkling
Distant stars shine to spite me
As they deny my wishing
Now left to drift and drown
I am swallowed in the cold sea
Vacant and heartless sound
Of interminable asphyxiation and sinking
I don’t want to die tonight
I just want to be believed
May I burn beautiful and bright
That you will wish upon me
Comments
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Wow
Thats deep for real.... I like the part that you turn my world upside down
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normally i don't read long poems, yes i consider 42 lines long, but i'm glad i read yours.. i like the feeling you grew in this poem
You took my breath away
Then never gave it back
Soon muscles gave way
And these lungs collapse- i loved this part
you tend to communicate well with the reader, as if you are reading.
thank you for this poem
Evanna
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