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eyes

when I look unoticed into your eyes
I feel they lament your whimsical lies
others may see it or maybe just me
your words linger while your eyes try to flee

I know your soul doesn't harbour evil
and your heart must run with what you feel
its a part of life to feel low and beaten
and its life itself that keeps us dreaming

so keep following the path that you know exist
and cast aside doubts and look through the mist
what you will see is what you can have
and what you can dream  of is within your grasp

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  • Ravenblood
    September 25, 2008

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    Hmm. Its pretty decent. You'd need to fix it up a bit, as you said, put some grammar in and such.

    Keep writing though.

    Claire-Anne