I myself Ardent
will show you:
this woman
I'd like to be shown
all tastes arranged
superb colours distinct
let them mix
into moves of gold
for stir made crazy
life reaches above
for more
new and before unknown.
Let showing you how
to show me
not kill mystery
stopped dead in the obvious
so lightly to share
sunken deeper down
into depths
under enlivened ultramarine
against the bright
resplendent words
of affair's neat ochre'd warmth
scent scattered
across our surface
seen crimsoned in heat
intimate royal purples
gleaned from special air
treasures so ripe to steal
so taken this white generosity
bidden so
generously begging
both ankles indulgently bitten
just as man desired
to ask for
the gift of
those eagle-wings
awarded inside
these garden gates
compelled to properly meet.
Author notes
Inspired by the poetry of ardentMarch, which I wasn't familiar with until responding to this contest. Very glad now that I did... can only hope that she might be also 
... and if not, please help me!
Inspirations included the reading of:
wildflowers
the move
after the last chance
savoring a poem
beautiful man
urgency
cloud
A contest entry
- A new spin on an old contest by Suzanne Dia.
1750 points, ended October 13, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere response and critique
Comments
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Wonderful
You said what I have not the words to say.
She is a wonderful poet/person.
Congrad's on the Silver.
Joe
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I love that you chose someone who was unfamiliar to you, and you wrote beautifully for her as well
Thanks so much for this inspiring entry, and for taking on the challenge of something/someone new.
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Hi Suzi...I wanted to thank you for this contest ... not only Sol, but you as well made me smile because I wouldn't have had this poem written for me without your contest..
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Thank you Suzanne, I'm simply delighted to receive your silver!
and I'm also very pleased to have been able to come up with something you think worthy of it, for Tara.
Sol
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Tara is such a wonderful writer, and a good friend. I am so happy to see how you've captured her essence in your own superb style. Love, Lane
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While reading this poem, I feel each emotion/mood I had while writing each of the poems that inspired you while writing this one ..lol...I hope that makes sense,- I find that so interesting..this is beautiful & colorful, Sol, thank you so much, a perfect poem to read the first day of autumn, it has a little bit of each color, and a little bit of every mood.
"against the bright
resplendent words
of affair's neat ochre'd warmth
scent scattered
across our surface"
so lovely..and I am smiling..
thank you again for this tribute, Sol!
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Thanks for the inspiration Tara... we got a Silver!
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congrats!
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Well, I'm very muchly smiling too!
The sense I make is that I couldn't have asked for a better response than the one you've been so generous enough to give me.
Thank you so much
Sol
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I think this is great....really rich, if you know what I mean.
I'm sure she'll like it. Good luck in the contest.X
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Good luckX
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