A froggy mind, hidden between two
different worlds, dryness and wetness,
celebrates a new period in mankind's night.
Arising from earth's belly, one giantly step into unknown.
Feathered cultures, swim on it, connect forces
of different colourful airs, enlightened
with synaptic messages, cursed as rudimentary,
hierarchic-strange, each mind its place, one
soul to fix it.
A new wedding in a glassy world, where every
rain-drop has his own name, my animal part,
my froggy part tasting
evolution in a nutshell, a grumpy angel beats a bassy symphony
on a brain-trunk; a croaking primate seduces
amphibian leaps, shakes off hardened tinsel, in the
forest of water-addicted minds. Now the green notes
jump into life's next octave.
Author notes
Prompt: Frog
Nevel
Amaranthine Lover
A contest entry
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an interesting piece
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love the closing line, very clever stuff
thanks for such a good entry here
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see, this is why these contests are great..
you can throw a simple prompt like 'frog' out there
and end up with something you never would have expected..
I love where you took this.
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this is a very creative idea and wholly unexpected from the prompt.. i imagined ponds, and frog noise and all sorts of wildlife imagery.. but this.. wow'
thanks so much for really stepping outside the conventional box on this one
glad you stayed in
m
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Thank you
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never really thought that mind could be amphibious...hehe
amazing idea!!!
Thank you for sharin this.
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Wow teach this is froggytastic, good luck in the contest
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i enjoyed the idea that every rain drop has its own name
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step-steps
colourfully-colourful
rudimentair-rudimentary
hierachic-strange-not sure what you mean by this.
The message in itself is universal. Life is constantly revealing itself in all her manifestations, the frog being at the bottom of the achievement lsit, but still, an amzing creature nontheless.
I love this message. Best wishes to you sir,
jin
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