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Survival

I am still here.
Tho you tried your best.
My cuts,
bruises,
and pain
will all subside.

However,the memory
of all that you did,
of all that you caused
will stay forever
within me.

Because of you
and all you did
I no longer trust.

I no longer feel comfortable
around others.
I am always on my guard
expecting a hit,
a pinch,
a bite,
some kind of pain.

I find that when someone approaches me
I tense up.
I find that I am on guard
ready,
expecting,
something to happen.

Know this
that I have survived!
That I will
in time,
come to terms with all that
has happened to me.

But know
that I will never forgive you.

Author notes

pre-write is survival freshwrite is childhood innocence lost

This is #1

Also I used option #3


AP name is t r e k k e r g i r l

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  • Butterfly.Wingz
    April 22

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    this is really well written very impacting read. i liked the subtlety of it it gave it alot more power. great structure. thank you so much for entering.
    xoxox
    Tasha


  • WednesdayJade
    April 1

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    This is really good and all too true, the cuts and bruises fade pretty quickly but the memories never will.
    I agree with everything you've said... abuse/rape/assault causes you to lose your trust, to always be on guard, to be uncomfortable and afraid. This is very relatable.
    You also show a lot of strength, which is inspiring. You're determined that you will be able to get on with your life and come to terms with what has happened, I'm glad =]
    I will never be able to forgive either... I wish I could... forgiveness isn't for the abusers, it's for us, to set ourselves free. Shame it's so difficult =/
    Great write
    x x x
    Oh yeh, will you please add your ap name in AN... spaced out so I can read it


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    February 7
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    Powerful, and shows strength.
    I found honesty, pain and truth.

    Shari

  • phoenixonfire
    February 6

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    This is so painful as well as powerful write!! It brings out such a strong emotion and with so much perfection! This is beautiful write!! Congrats on the silver and good luck on the other contests!

    ~pri


  • psychomonkey
    February 6

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    Very well written and the picture definately added to the power of the poem. thank you for entering


  • jenadyleigh silver member
    February 4

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    amazing write here, and very vivid as you bring the picture to life. Being abused is so sad ... Well done!


  • lyricist
    January 29

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    i love the picture. the picture really goes well with this poem and shows true powerful emotions behind it. great piece


  • laimra
    January 27

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    oh nice. i tried to commenton one of your other poems but it wasn't approprate. grrr! all i wanted to do was return the favor!hehehe anyway nice write. i like it lot's


  • ciara12
    January 27

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    This is a great write my favorite part is "Because of you and all you did I no longer trust." It makes me think of the people that destroy our world and pollute it with all this bad behavior with trying to hurt peple....


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    January 26

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    The picture on this really helped with the impact of the words, this was very powerful. You have expressed ourself brilliantly here.
    Laura


  • TheSpiralGenerator
    January 26

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    I know exactly how you feel. I can't trust anyone anymore. Sometimes I even doubt my best friends, and my boyfriend. because I'm just so used to being hurt... Great write you have here though.

    • trekkergirl
      January 26
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      pain comes in all forms. And it usually leads to the loss of trust. Took me years to get over a lot of that messed up feelings I got just because of a foolish old man and what he did.


  • couldbeworse
    January 26

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    I enjoyed this so much b/c I can relate to it. Its terrible to have to live as an abuse surviver b/c you are always on guard, etc. but at least we survived! thank God. great write!


  • spideracer gold member
    January 25

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    You've painted here abuse that immediately feels like a poem one can relate to, such sadness although lacking great imagery, still shines with emotions of pain and unforgiving eyes.

  • starving-to-survive
    December 25, 2008

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    Wow....so intense and true. absolutly fantastic.......i can really relate. you are a fantastic writer. thakns for entering my contest

  • Vera Rich
    November 20, 2008
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    Sorry - you seem to have misunderstood the requirements of my competition - it was for poems about Poetry and/or poets. I wish you luck with this poem, elsewhere - but as far as the "Celebrating poetry and poets" competition is concerned, I do have to say "No".


  • aien aristeuein
    November 14, 2008
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    Very emotional. Perfect entry.
    Thanks.


  • DragonBlue gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Thank you for expressing your pain and entering my contest. Please run this poem through a spell/grammar check and let me know when you are done editing so that I can come back and score this pen.

    Blessed Be~
    )O(
    DragonBlue

    • trekkergirl
      October 20, 2008
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      I did as you asked though to be honest when I ran it through spell check I was surprised that tho made it through okay. So I guess it really is a word and not slang like I thought. Oh well. And I did my best on grammar. I'm not real good at that So I guess you can say this is done. Thanks for letting me know it needed editing.


  • aeolia
    October 19, 2008

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    As someone who was abused as a child (well, mentally and emotionally), I know how this feels, but the 'poem' itself is so bland. Even if I can relate to it, I don't care for it because you haven't said anything new, much less interesting, concerning your experience. It's like a smörgåsbord of collected bromides concerning the aftermath of abuse. Imagery and metaphor could save this.

    Thanks for the entry anyways.

    -hiraeth


  • MYsecondchance
    October 18, 2008
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    i like this i felt the picture brough it all together flawlessly.
    thanx for entering


  • Tercil gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    such a dramatic write, it's almost real life, and if it isn't it sure should be. Your observations make great practical use.


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    September 29, 2008

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    Excellent take on the picture--Vivid, yet, sadly tragic
    imagery---Very well versed.
    Well done & best of luck in the contest!


  • Flowergirl
    September 28, 2008
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    very nice i loved it fits the pic good luck....


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 19, 2008

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    Now this is the type of poem I think many readers will be able to relate to. Nicely done. Thanks for entering my contest. I'm honored to have you share your work here. Good luck!

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