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For God, growl once with me
For Sin, crawl to the Sea
Devour the lot of cold steel
With men who trade salt
To spin the great wheel
For God, let’s go insane
For sin, smoke with champagne
Be the young feline
Make your voice a smoke stream.
Oh universe above, born center-hot
Ice, wood, bone, and steam.
Soon bleed eye and know of a poison present,
but don’t blame me.
Oh, for God, growl once with me
For sin, walk with a cane
Celebrate God’s delicious needle fame
To challenge your own name
Speak up, and be game
For God, growl once with me
For sin, drink hot champagne
Be the young feline
Make your voice a smoke stream
Oh universe above, born center-hot
Ice, wood, bone, and steam
Soon bleed eye and know of a poison present,
but don’t blame me.
For God, crawl to the sea
For sin, let’s go insane
Glass, marble, tea
Yet you still are the me
that I never could sustain
What could I've regained?
For God, growl once with me
For sin, smoke yours profane
For god, growl once with me.
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Written January 21st, 2004
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What's up horus? It's a long time since I read any of your stuff, you're getting frighteningly good. It kills me not to try nitpicking a poem but I listened to this and there's nothing I'd change. One day I'll be able to afford to get cdbaby to ship over here, until then I'll just have to listen online. Peace.
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Awesome lyrics and congratulations on your success as a poet and a singer. You have attained remarkable achievements and wish you all the best.
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That's cool man. I listened to it. Wouldn't of thought the lyrics would work but they did. I was laughing at your title Internet Games when I clicked on your featured. It gave me a list of lyrics and the list was a different name. What is this, Alice in Wonderland? lol
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Excellant /intriguing
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Well, I don't know about these other people, but I really like it.
I love the implied connection of animalism and spiritualism. In fact this has a very pagan feel to it, with the mention of salt, sea, wood. A very interesting write...
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heavenly
that was excellence in executuion.myself,being god,i found it quite flatterring.never mind my spelling and grammatical errors ive been sipping on ambrosia perhaps a bit too much tonite,besides im god i dont make mistakes so how datre you even imply that i did.you should pray i dont strike you impotent just to make a point.anyways i enjoyed your words perhaps only because i gave them to you in the first place and its somehopw more fun to pretend im actually reading something i didnt write for once but i cant fault you fotr that -
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Very interesting lyrics and rhythm in this piece. Not necessarily my cup of tea, but I'm just an old hippie! .
I like the title and how it fits with the verses.
Unfortunately I'm at work (lunch-break) and don't have audio capabilities. It was a good read, just the same.
Best wishes -Emmjay
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To say the least, the lyrics are different. I didn't pull up the audio - I'd rather read the words and get the interpretation just from there for now. I imagine the audio is as strong as the piece tho.
Great images on this and different overall with the take on growling and God. It's certainly nothing I would expect - but I have realized that reading your stuff will always bring the unexpected.
Well done. Kimmie -
I have listened to this before, and I can't remember if I commented on it or not. I love the way your music and words to this feel like they slither around starting at your ankles and working their way methodically up your body til they reach your mind. It is very deliberate and well measured. Trance like. I LOVE IT.
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The mention of sin and God in the same lyrical verse just makes me all squishy inside. The concept of God growling is fresh and innovative and makes me want to howl at the moon... just a bit
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And you should be equally satisfied for having come in third for
the horus8 "who in the fuck are you award, and why should we care?"
I'd send your ribbon, bag of granola and cotex down under, but alas I'm
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last time I checked this was a poetry site, not a pro-god poetry site.
And since this is America, and we as Americans have written a constitution
keeping god and religion out of our government and it's branches,
I think that pretty much gives me the freedom
as a poet to say pretty much anything I want any time I want
any way I want. And being a humanitarian has absolutely
nothing to do with god. It has to do with humans.
that's why it's called humanitarian and not goditarian.
Not only are you a bore, but you're a boring judge
of people; something I can never become, because
I'm much too busy writing and making a difference
in people lives instead of judging them 'because
I think I am on god's team' like you do. God has no team.
God has the pope and a million rotten governments
and filthy political thieves and war mongers to do his
good work for him. because you and your god are
so loving that the entire world is on a shit sled to hell.
you clowns think hell is undergroend and on fire?
Let me tell you, I'd rather go there than have to live
the hell religious men put women and children through
when they set out to kill other's in the name OF GOD.
can't you feel the love?
over a million dying children do ever day,
die for your god, for your fathers war's and money
and land. You should all be ASHAMED,
and practice what you preach, and worry about
your own dirty floors, before anothers.
and you tell me that if my poems for god, it's ace!
and if it's not I suck? You lemming hack...
So pathetic you don't even have a valid artistic opinion
without god, how appropriate. I have news for
you, I don't even know who you are, I've never read your poetry,
and life will go on regardless.
good day.
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"Be the young feline
Make your voice a smoke stream" a personal fav. You invoke the mind so well, this was a lovely high.
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I have no clue what you're mumbling about. Are you on Acid?
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I do like the lyrics, which state his message. The only thing I did not care for is what he posted on Dec. 28th. Honest opinions should be respected and taken into account. Loved your LYRICS.
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very well written
Wow I am a little confused but I like it. Is it for god or against i guess it could go either way right? Kikidee6971 -
Interesting written lyrics. I didn't listen to the audio (mostly because my parents don't generally approve of me listening to stuff on the internet), but the lyrics were interesting.
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I DO LIKE THE AUDIO TOO, IT WORKS BETTER THAN THE WRITTEN VERSION IN MY OPINION TOO. INTERESTING, THE REPETITION OF GROWL THROUGHOUT THE POEM.
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that's pretty good, i like it, but don't really understand it. The audio is pretty good, but i don't know in poem format. well, nice job.
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amazing!! and the rhyming is really good - the picture adds to the magic of this poem - well done and keep it up - lots of love
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Ezra Pound (1885-1972) and Arthur Rimbaud (1854 – 1891) Both excellent Old Poets I was looking for something new. Nevermind.
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If I were you I wouldn't go looking for great writing in a catagory marked cd lyrics.
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I was told you were a great writer. Truly disappointed am I.
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something technical: you missed the first "champagne" and spelled it "chamagne" here instead. I'm not a hardcore fan of this kind of music, but I agree with more5600. It could well be an intoxicating brew in its own right, in ears prepared to listen to it.
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luved the picky... like that scary massonic one theyve just unveiled at westminster abbey - or was it st pauls - whichever
a seriously spiritually piccy anyway
the workd were good
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i havent listen to the audio but it seems better as a song or spoken word so after i comment this imma check your audio great write though keep it up
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I can see how this would work better as a song than a poem, and I suppose being as I can't listen to the song on my crappy computer, i can't leave a good comment
However, I can't write lyrics or music to save my life, so kudos to you for being able to.
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Definitely better on the audio, doesn't read well as written, maybe the line breaks should replicate the actual breaks in the audio, which has a very Nico-era Velvet Underground sensibility (Lou Reed under Warhol's spell) But I find it compelling on many levels. -Al
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Sorry I already commented on this piece. I saw the title and immediately thought of Howl by Ginsberg.
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Nice Lyrics........a lot of emotion in here.
Great job here! You can really write well mate. -
All is not as it seems
Very lyrical and imagery is awesome.Lots of deep emotions from the warm to the cold,the shy,the bold.Have you had your lyrics published and if so where can I buy the trac? -
I really enjoyed this though I can't really say why. It flowed nicely and had strong emotion
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a write like this on always has me wonderin' what the writer really means... but then it can be just fine to not know... draw your own conclusions or just enjoy the damn poem and stop bein' so analytical... i say that to myself
i listedened to the track too...i had to after reading the poem... they are both interesting... as in i liked them. one doesn't have to "get" the meaning to enjoy
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I liked the audio track much more than I like this as a written piece. It definitely works wonderfully with the music - and you (or whoever that is whose voice that is) are a very talented "reader". This is wonderful read aloud with that background, but...in my opinion, not even close to some of your other stuff as a written work.
Still....I really enjoyed the audio. Very excellently done.
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You're very talented. I'm not a music buff so please forgive my undereducated music ear.
I hope your promotions go well for you.
~Dee
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Very sensual and invoking ... Makes me want to hear it to music
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I am waiting to get home to listen, as this machine does not recognize the format. Can't wait. Do you feature your music anywhere else, like Garage Band ( no insult intended, their site seems to work well) or other?
I look forward to this.
Peace, Ed -
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I would like to listen to some of your bands music but fear this dial up would never do it justice. With that i'll just have to stick with these lyrics. Take care and God bless.
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wooow. this is som really good stuff! the picture adds to it i agree. i get the sense man is challenging fate? which is kinda like challenging what God has in store for u? i dunno- that's what i see. good write.
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Bon!
This is a good song, and I love the picture, so i will check out the song itslf, hopefully it is metal enough for me! Good luck with future songs, and if its not metal then hopefully industrial! -
sigh. My idiot computer.
I couldn't get it to play either. But I like the lyrics. And "poison present,"
I liked muches.
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Perrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr meeeeeooooowwwwww
I will have to go listen, but wow, I love the lyrics! I know a few people who have gone insane for God. I feel sorry for them. -
A deeper dive
It is very old attempt to invent the reality of the universe becoming perplexed in words .It is an old phenomena of the humanheart since centuries. It is like a hitting to the mountain which is transparent. Although the work by the poet in terms of selecting the subject as well as dealing this so delicately is really a remarkable and just slick.Welldone.prabhudayal khattar -
Nice work indeed.
There's very much a Titanium feel to this, the silvery grey image you portray is cold, eerie and almost spooky beyond compare. maybe the title stated that feeling off, but whatever it is, it really does have a metalic feel! "needle fame", -
I'm going to applaud cause I have click on your write twice.I'm sorry but it must be over my head,cause I don't understand it.No fault of yours, but mine.I clicked over to listen to it,and couldn't get it to play.Also not your fault.I'm sure it has merit. My lose~~Suseann
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The rhythm is delightful and gives a liberating sense...I didn't get it at the frist or second read but this tragicomic song got me involved...there's something out-of-the-box-like experience here.
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Excellent
This really should be a song, it has a beat to it! Great job, I have given all my applause away but if I had it, you would get one for this, it is excellent, actually musical! -
another nice set of lyrics that I can sing to and get a nice rhythem to it. and the message is extremely deep and truthful youth/age indulge/ pay I enjoyed singing it
love and light
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behind that hardneed exterior is the real horus...wait tht is the real horus awesoem set of lyrics hun! keep writing you big meany you
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sweeet guitarist lol. "celebrate Gods delicious needle frame"..hmm ok ive read this thing three times .. i need to go study lol. very good tho. music lyrics voice (is that a pic of u on the link.. if it is thats good too ). two thumbs up.
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I clicked into this without knowing the category it was placed in. By the third stanza, I was thinking to myelf that this could be a song Well, these are very interesting lyrics, though a bit frightening
, they're still interesting. I wish you the best in your music career.
Take care
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Fucking palm greaser.
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So nice of you to say,
no wonder you've been poverty stricken
and beaten down enough to have to use
the library's computer, tsk... how very sad,
Should I donate some money, or a carreer
skill to you, would you like that? I have a few spare
g4's lying around, perhaps if you masturbated a little more
for me with bubbles my pet asian transexual we could
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I guess this is one of those poems that I would have to listen to, rather than read. Such as it is, I'm at a public library, so I'm not in a position to listen to it. I don't like reading it, though.
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Excellent lyrics. . .impressive.
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For god, growl once with me.
I don't know why, but that image kinda gives me the shivers...lol. But in a good way. This entire piece was hella smooth, and sparkled as only the good stuff can, and I really enjoyed the muted contempt lurking in the lines...lol. Once again, excellent work, Mr. 8, as you make me go...things that make you go hmmmmm...
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You're going in my favorites.
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awesome write, been a while since ive read something of this nature.. left a blank spot in my mind i like writes that i actually have to think about to understand nice write!!
read my writing sometime
Michael -
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horus this sounds so good played in open g with the b string held down on the thrid fret... nicotiene stains and flat beer... excellent lyrics...
billy -
great job
I really lke your work. I have written a few lyrics myself Have not posted any yet but plan on doing so soon. I have allot of work not posted yet. I have to say your writting style is awsome and your work is great. -
Very cool lyriiics, ya know i think I may just have to go perchase one of your cd's to help fight the good cause, lol. Good stuff.
~Tina -
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The song can be heard at gangbox.com
And if you want to read some of my better poetry
Go to my 'contemporary section for you thinkers'.
Good luck, have fun.
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lol ok that was a bit of a funny conversation there that i stumbled on. heh anyway! now im interested in knowing what the song sounds like lol damnit! pretty damn awesome stuff, though. off i go to read more!
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Sure.
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so can i put you in as a collaborator on my thing '110 commandments or 110 things not to do on a rainy day'you would be great at this... dynamite donkeys and testicles and things....
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Excuse me? Can I write humor?
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would you like to join in my collaboration i need someone to write 30 commandments or 30 things not to do on a rainy day.we have thought of 65 or so already . i could put you on as collaborator.....aw go on...can you write humour ?
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Me too, what do you mean "write something"...
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just practising my caustic comments
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why dont you try writing something
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tits
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Sodomized yak.
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Crooked, uncut, pud.
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pushed up too far tampon
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Straddled urinal
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shit for brains
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Flaming pillock.
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bastard fart arse
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you know you love me really
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Bitch.
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what
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yeah yeah whatever
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Yeah, all of my early stuff is like that, well some of it.
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you kno, i thought thered be more singing... it's still hawt, but, different than i was expecting.
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listening.
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Have you heard it?
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sigh =(
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Well damn, read all this and wow, it was .....well i think I have made it pretty clear what i think of your lyrics and music, great stuff here, awesome.
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Either did my last wife.
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typo
YOUR FIRST CHAMPAGNE didn't have enough "p" in it! -
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