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(opening)
No, that's what he did for an occupation
He wrote funeral songs, and he was good at it.
{Verse 1}
The sun came down, the moon went up
I’m underground, I've given up
You're camping out right on my grave
You're so convinced that I'm your slave.
{Chorus}
So take a hard look when next you can
Even though you're on the lam
A psychic vampire in a leather suit
Selling like a vendor the Dhatura root
Jumping up and down like you're so damn cute
So scoot bitch
So scoot bitch
So scoot bitch scoot.
{Verse 2}
When deep in sleep a silence found
I'm far away no longer bound
I hope and pray that you're still there
Crazy-eyed with graying hair
Truth and dare, don't compare.
So take a hard look when next you can
Even though you're on the lam
A psychic vampire in a leather suit
Selling like a vendor the Dhatura root
Jumping up and down like you're so damn cute
But shit, nothing's cute.
{Last verse}
You're out the door with a pocket and a dime
Your mother taught you how to be on time
Nothing compares to you… Nothing
So I dedicate this cut to you
It's all I have left it's the final clue
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Author notes
Dare to listen
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www.garageband.com/artist/horus8
Written January 21st, 2004
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glad you liked it.
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I listened and then saw the video...you are a baddd man fo' sho'
best wishes dude
Peace Muddy
now it's stuck in my head...that's a good thing
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I'm gone to listen to this beauty...I know it will be filled with your haunting lyrical voice...this is the shit
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Nice style I like this specailly these lines I love
You're out the door with a pocket and a dime
Your mother taught you how to be on time
Nothing compares to you… Nothing
Nothing compares to me? nothing does nothing can nothing ever will.. Great style for the lyrics -
Strong. Visual. Could feel the beat, beat, beat under yur
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You show both sides of feelings...the wanting and the anger...as much u love someone you hate them at the same time. Great work.
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this was wonderful! well written, and it made the reader think. i loved it! keep it up
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"You're out the door with a pocket and a dime..." this is clearly a well-written piece, and a very enjoyable listen as well. Thanks for sharing.
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Wow. You def. are good at what you do. Never have I've been so impressed by one piece.
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Darkly Superb
I always figure music to have a melody but the lack of one is made up w/ the awesome lyrics. I might just have a new thing for melody-lacking songs
. It's easy to listen to.
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I'm from another time in this thing we know as existence. I guess if I was from your time I might like the song. Just can't get over how easy the bitch word is used. If someone called me that to my face, it'd be on! And I'd win!
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Wow these words are so lined up perfectly together. I couldn't of wrote something better then this. I like how its together and upbeat. I also like how you are dedicating it to someone. That would make me feel good. keep it up and
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Wow Simply amazing
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very nice piece.love to listen
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Though I very much enjoyed the listen and look, I think that what I like most is the power of the lyric before I clicked the hear and watch. The visual and audio gives it the guided tour, but the words themselves are worth repeated reading.
I love the reference to the psychic vampire. Some folks just bleed the life right out of ya.
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Wonderful piece, loved the rhytem and flow of this one. captivating. Great work. Keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny
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Raw and unbridled
Sometime thing raw and unbridled cut to the empty abyss in all of us...thanks for sharing your feelings and thoughts -
I'll have you know sir, those pants are pressed cotton.
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great video...i have heard other of your songs posted here and this blows the others away...it was entertaining, which is what all art ultimately is, after all, if we want to be cynical enough.
anyway, anyone who can do backflips in white jeans gets my vote.
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I really like this. The words are very good, and the music is excellent. Very nice work on this hymn.
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Scary. In a good way, of course, and powerful. The rhyme gave me shivers. And that picture matches beautifully. Very well written.
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Im fpretty damn positive I read this before and left a comment then so I won't dally now but just to say that it still holds the same power on repeat readings as it did the first time!
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brilliant
well done...i like it.....a lot has been said so i will simply say thank you and look forward to more work from you.. -
Wish I coulda heard the music...but the writing was very vivid on its own...this is a great write...keep up the good work, many blessings to you.
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I can understand the demand. I'm learning more of the passionate desire among young people for this type of song and write. It seems that underlying all the positive media about things many people do not see anything light hearted to grab a hold of. I have been communicating with some of the younger angst author's here at AP and am finding out that while many of the writes are morbidly dark the push is just 'entertainment', period, end of story. That kind of took the depth off of it for me. I am reading things looking for true sentiment and it's all just shock value to them like sneaking a porn magazine when I was a kid. I'm not sure where it is all headed, but I am certain that an entire generation of real talent may be lost, because no one is going to sit around listening to these things when they are 40-60 years old. That pretty much limits the whole genre to obscurity and the age will be remembered more by the pop stars with no talent whose lyrics will endure time better even though they are weak and sugar coated. That part is a shame. RC
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Incredible job on this! Though I must admit I almost didn't click it because of the title, but I'm glad I did! I agree it was very original and entertaining. Loved it!
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It is original, creative and well written.
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I think I may have read an earlier draft of this before, and this version is much improved compared to what I rememeber. Nice work.
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There's always a demand for generic accessable lyrics.
Popular culture, musicians, producers, singers.
If fact there's an entire industry built around
lyricists. They're always the best paid poets
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I love the beat . . . it's strong and adds a lot to the vocals and the words! This was a veri clever write. Keep penning . . . keep sharing . . . and keep singing!
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Interesting occupation - much demand for this kind of poetry? Kind of unique and unusual, not that I am into this kind of stuff but...
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Invigorating
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More drivel than need be on one web page. At least the trash I write smells like sex instead of shite. Vampires. Oh now that is soooooooo original dude. Right.
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Looks like a load of puerile teenage Hollywood West Coast trash to me. Yawn Yawn Yawn Yawn.
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Ooooh, wow this is so good! I love it!
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this was pretty funny and really creepy at the same time. i say creepy because i think vampires are really freaky but i still enjoyed reading this poem it was quite good i thank you for sharing
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Yes. Thank you.
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love the 'crazy eyed and graying hair' line loved the poem!
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I'm not a lyrics expert, but it's a song I'd listen to again. But then I'm attracted to the dark side. Scoot bitch added to the song--I mean, how many songs do you get to sing that refrain. I thought it was fun!
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It sound like a creepy write to me...it sorta confuses me, but keep on writin
. Very unique
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really good! the song is ace too, i listened to it about three times haha and i just love it! did you write it then? is it you singing it?
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Well .. this has sent shivers down my spine so far of it that I've listened to ... Geenie mack, its well done, the voice is perfectly suited to the words, with the diction n all so clear!
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I LOVE THIS POEM, IT HAS VAMPIRES IN IT..WOOHOO -
HAHHAHAHAHH I LOVE THIS:
So scoot bitch
So scoot bitch
So scoot bitch scoot
ITS SO RANDOM :s lol nice job
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wow, i love it! i didnt get to listen to the music the sond on my comp isnt working right now...but just going by the words it would sound kinda good in like a heavy blues soundin riff. i dotn know mabie im way off track but it just made me think of the dark alleys in the deep south...new orleans ariea mabie. idk i wish i had sound so i could hear how it was meant to be heard lol i ahte my comp
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I like the picture as well as the poem. The picture adds to the whole theme and mood of the song. Great combination. And the song is truly wonderful. I really like it. Great job, keep up the good work.
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So, you heard the song?
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I really liked this. The rthyme scheme worked well and the imagery is great, but I think the "scoot bitch" part did take away from the song a bit. Still, a very nice piece. Great job!
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wow.. i love this! it is really really nice... i love the imagery and the "camping on my grave" bit.. well done
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Even if this kind of poetry is normally not what I like this piece was really worth reading and prefect with the music presented- great idea and worth coming here- a good link and worth each click and point
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that was really cool! you write with a lot of feeling... hold on, your name... let me check.. horus8. are you part of a band? imn sorry that i couln't listen but i did read and it was really beautiful. i'll write down the site nd listen to it some other time but i'm sure it will be as good as the lyrics!!
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Very nicely done! I love the darkness in it and the ending chorus lines work so damn well.
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Dark and descriptive. An excellent write. i love " a psychic vampire in a leather suit selling like a vendor the dhutura root"... well done!
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Vampires in leather suits...what could be sexier or maore sensual. In fact, the whole vampire thing of fucking and feeding is a super turn on.
I dig these lyrics and the song too. Outstanding! Damn good work here! Here's wishing you lots of luck in the judging. This one desrves a trophy!
Cisco
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This was awesome! I loved it, especially the lines:
"A psychic vampire in a leather suit
Selling like a vendor the Dhatura root"
I know a few psi- vamps and even less sangi vamps like me, but this seemed likew a song that would work for both worlds. I loved it.
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Wow. That was awesome. The music was amazing and the words were so easy to fall in love with. I think the
"So scoot bitch
So scoot bitch
So scoot bitch scoot."
kind of took away a little, but it was really great besides that. Good visuals and totally crazy. I love it. (good luck in the contest)
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I said "shit" once.
So, the proper syntax would have been (for you)
To say, "I wish you didn't cuss at all" not cuss so much,
because 'once' is not SO much, savvy chic? -
A shmeksy vampire poem- I'm jealous.
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Everything here sort of puts you outside of yourself. It is not my genre , but I must give you credit for a job very well done and a creative idea to give a link to music with it,
Reenie
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Applaud
Modern vampyrisms with a touch of the bondage, the sexual connections still shine, much to the annoyance of the Divine.
Good topical song here, a bite of the surreal.
Excellent work that is well worthy of applause.
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Interesting and stunning.
Well that graphic was stunning and this puts a more modern spin on the subject of vampires. I can see this one on Buffy the Vampire style thingy. Very interesting and the graphic as I said is stunning. -
you have to click the link and hear the song, that's where the moment truly captures itself.
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WOW This is very cool, i love the whole darkness feel to it, these are some cool lyrics, very gothic feeling, and I love that pic on top. nice job
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tres scooty
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great...trying to hear it too but you know i cant work these damn things i already got lost once...anyway i will give it another go...what swearing...someone said they didnt like swearing i never noticed any swearing...
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love it! a vampire song, a funeral hym (how appropriate!)
nice rhyme to the lyrics too.
A psychic vampire in a leather suit. now I could get into that
good stuff, jeremi.
~travis
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This is great on its own but actually hearing it, it really makes the piece! Really nicely done!
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It is taking forever for my computer to download the song, but I really like the lyrics... they have a sort of rough edge to them that I find appealing.
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I was amazed you had a recording to fit this contest. But have one you did and i thought ot was great. I kinda got a laugh about the deaf cow but that may be caus I've had a couple of drinks and everything is funny.
Hope to hear from you soon.
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i just went nuts over this write!!
the beat was just excellent and a thrill to read not to mention it punched off with imaginary
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like the song
like the art
its all cool
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i liked how your words flowed.....but im not a huge fan of swearing......to be honest. But you are a very excellent writer and you definetly have a talent for creativity! good job! -kels-
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This is a very strong piece for the genre. I am thinking of taking up drugs after reading this commentary.
Wish me luck.
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Well, unfortunately I opened this at work, where our company firewall prevents me from hearing the actual work. I CAN speak to the fact that the lyrics are excellent. I wouldn't have picked you to enter a vampire contest, but notwithstanding the subject matter you produce an outstanding work -- that wends in vampires in its own unique and ironic way. I have told you before -- true music lyrics are a skill I don't claim to possess, and I envy those like yourself who do.
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The man of many lyrics! A hymn now! This is great!
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G-G-Great Like Frosted Flakes
Fantastic, Origanal, I loved the Opening "No thats what he did for an occupation, he wrote funeral songs and he was good at it." The entire poem reminded me of the song "I never told you what I did for a living" by My Chemical Romance. However, you used the word UP in two consecutive lines in Verse 1. I must be good if I got that picky. -
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AWESOME work!!! really loved your choice of words n the smooth flow of this piece. a great rhythm too just and absoluely marvellous lyrical work.
well done! n happy writing
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I like it. Don't ask me why. It's late and I'm tired, so perhaps I should reread it in the a.m. It has a certain je ne sais quoi, and it flows well.
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this has a nice rhythem to it and sings out load nicely i enjoyed it much and the refernence to the scared Dhatura root warmed me and brought back intence memories good job!
Love and light
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What I'd really like to know is how you break some cliches, stab a few daggers of satire, and just make some fluid imagery and motion with your work..
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You have to de-robe and run around nude postulating
While chanting about the wonders of cantelope, and
at that point in time a CD will fall out of the nearest chandlier
(if there's no chandlier available, check the pussy's saucer).
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But yeah, of course.
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Oh... Well shit, don't tell Ed he's hung like a horse.
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Oh - you are referring to edpeterson? I was talking about Mr. Ed.
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That's like saying I like when people drink, AND fall down.
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You need not, I know Ed quite well.
I recently talked him into putting his
First book together for publication.
It's really quite good, I talked him
Into calling it Yellow, appropriately
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thats awsome! great song lyrics, i like it when people not only write poetry but they also write songs too. very creative, good luck in the contest!
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Thanks, I saved it just for you. Later, I will blather on and on about this genius at AP who is a charicature of himself... his name is Ed.
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reason to hope
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well i don't kno many "useless facts" but i do kno my music
very cool shit, i hope you dont mind i bookmarked that link and will listen to more.
curious to kno if you have a cd available and how i can get my hands on a copy.
excellent work horus. and including the music link with the poem is a stroke of marketing genius.
like to see more like this.
rock on
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Jimson Weed gives you hellacious cotton mouth, double vision and delusions of grandeur. Free for the taking around the bluffs of Playa del Rey - and a bargain at twice the price.
Just to add to Bohb's compendium: so named after Jamestown. A group of housefraus cooked up a stew with the stuff to keep King George's troopers busy while the founding fathers made good their escape.
This is a downright patriotic song you have here and it makes me proud to be an American.
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great poem. very deep. i really liked it. keep up the great work. i'll have to read more of your stuff. once agian, great poem!!!
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wow, this is great, i cant say much, i have to go. cheers!
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Download the song, it kicks ass.
you can down load it for free from
a lot of different places, enjoy. -
i havent downloaded or listend to the song, but i do like the lyrics and that pic is kick ass
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Oh yeah the song is great when reading the lyrics.
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I reckon this will make more sense when with music added to the background. Is it on one of your albums on the gangbox site? Wait. Stupid question, I can just go and check.
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