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Uncle Dismas' Farm






We will remember

the way the summer grass broke

like ice fingers

under the weight

of my uncle's latest expectation.

Even the creek knew,

ran away during the night,

when the crows grew silent.

My cousin's best friend, Dinni,

had her tongue inside my mouth,

finding hidden spiders with her fingertips

along my naked back,

the very moment

Uncle Dismas had his personal awakening

at the end of a rope.

Every time I think of Dinni,

it is late at night

and I don't have to see the brown grass, anymore -

three years we tried to pretend

we could be lovers

and the whole time

we were at the end of a rope.




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  • poet girl
    December 21, 2008
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    I like how you make little poetry stories. I like the ending on this one.


  • MuddyKing
    October 1, 2008

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    this one reaches me more than you know...I had an uncle Willis that was found at the end of his rope
    funny the things we remember when reading something good.
    thanks for that Scott...to be honest no one has pulled off writing like Darcy..lol
    peace Muddy


    • S A Adelmann
      October 1, 2008
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      No-one writes like Darcy - I din't even try to. I only wrote something with the hope that it would be good enough.

  • peacemaker
    September 23, 2008
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    You are a great writer. This is good man!

  • Nicole Hanna
    September 21, 2008

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    Tsk Tsk... she wouldn't use punctuation or capital letters. lol. But who cares, cuz this poem was purdy. Conversational, with still the perfect punch of yummy imagery. She'd be proud (if she ever bothered to be online these days... ahem...)


  • LalalalaLoopstah gold member
    September 19, 2008

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    I love the story in this poem. Have you ever thought of writing short stories, or even a novel? I would love to read something like that from you.


  • Saffron gold member
    September 18, 2008
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