Faintly i hear your voice
buried in the back of my mind
muffled and hidden
for no one else to find
burn marks left on my skin
from where you dared to touch
scars of things i've always wanted
your breathing was too much
feeling the liquid drip
as i claw into your flesh
grasping onto you
to hold you from the rest
the time of day is gone
for the chance i had is lost
i recognize the moments missed
at least i got my kiss.
Author notes
a little morbid, but it's not so much the words i used, it's more about what the real meaning is.
A contest entry
- & this is love? by Kiss the girl--x.
525 points, ended October 19, 2008, 26 entries
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very sad and morbid
i loved it!!!
love always -
I thought this had such a strong underlining tone of sadness and regret, I may be well off, like I saw the morbidness, but I also felt regret and sadness coming from it.
brilliantly described, and the last two lines, made me shiver a little whilst reading them.
thanks for entering
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Firstly this poem made me think about xmen and the character played by anna pacquin who hurts anyone who touches here.Than when i read the mordbid comment i looked a bit between the lines and it seems this is about the character in the poem killing their lover so that they can keep them for themselves and than realising what they've done. Great work with this poem, its so simply stated and not openly pushed in your face that it makes you have to think and read between the lines..nice work.
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in reading this i honest don't know what i think, it is a good poem but keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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