There is a feeling that I get,
when thinking of this place.
Every time I turn around,
I can see it in their face.
The children are hungry,
and their parents are too weak.
They can't work for food,
and their is no where to sleep.
Disease keeps on spreading,
like there is no tomorrow.
I can see it in their eyes,
I can see their sorrows.
We should make a donation,
or call someone.
We should help them get better,
and there country become one.
We should give them what we have,
education, love and health,
love is most important,
it really make the wealth.
So when you see that commercial,
when you're watching T.V.
please pick up the phone,
and call somebody.
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It is a novel idea, sadly these donation places take a large portion of the donation to "fund their cause" you can ask them how much actually goes to the people in need and they are required to tell you that so my advice to to shop around to find which send the largest amount to the poor. Nice write, good rhyming here.
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great topic
but it looses its flow in the 4th stanza.
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wonderful
this is a wonderful poem it really touched me and even tho i dont have no money to send those poor childern it just touvhes my heart that people like you care so much about other people and i really hope that poeple will make more donations to thoses children you poem is really good and touching
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I think we are all desensitized to seeing those images on TV and its good when someone reminds us that they are real and that there is something we can do about it. Well done, clever rhymes too.
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terrific
dear poet, your poem nearly moved me to tears because i also have the same feeling. And it is good for those of us who are touched by the poem to take action. It is a very good poem and i love it. I also have a similar poem entitled "hope".
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A noble though dear poet and yes we should do what we can but government are NOT doing what they should they are the ones we need to goad as they have the power to stop much of the poverty in the world...a wonderfully caring and passionate write dear poet
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and their is no where to sleep.
there
this is a good write from you and i wish you well in this contest that you have entered. viyanna roseamarie -
An amazing heartfelt poem with an important message to it! The poem itself had great flow and some good rhyming in it as well. you did a truly awesome job!
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a precious poem that makes me very glad, today. poignant and sweet, every line is a joy to read. you are a talented poet and i am so glad to read your work.
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I feel these words deep in my heart, and its no fun to go hungry or have to live like this. It is so sad Gods people has to go with out.
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I feel all of these words and more. beautiful write, best to you in the contest ...blessings always~ Trisha~
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From this piece I can see that you are very passionate about this. The hunger the disease that plagues those who cannot help themselves is too rampant to comprehend. Try what we may it still will not be enough. For greed will take and give nothing back. Wonderful write. Excellent. Thank you.
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this hits the heart in so many ways keep up the good work j
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Hummm..a wonderful and heartfelt take on the given prompt..I love it..well done..and my thanks for sharing it...
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A powerful message in weaved within this write. Very well done. One line"and 'there' country become one." I think it should be 'their' Other than that, good work. Thank you for entering
Sam
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