You walked away from me,
at the cold autumn's night...
i cried my heart out,
in a pale moonlight...
I sitted alone reminiscing our past,
and cannot help not to cry,
It hurts to remember dancing with you will suddenly last,
just like a blink of an eye.
With the cold of the wind, i hold back the memories
I felt I'm in heaven when I'm with you,
And suddenly realized that i love you with my heart and soul...
You complete me most but you hurted me too...
A contest entry
- ~ You Complete Me... by Nature Song.
515 points, ended September 22, 2008, 14 entries
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Hmmm, I was looking for sensual, romance and how it feels to be complete with our partners. You described how you feel and betral...anger here in this poem. Good poem.
~Sie
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welcome to all poetry
Hi ishelicious
The last stanza is my favorite, i think hurted probably should be hurt. Good poem well done poet
Please keep writing, reading and commenting
Barbara
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You know, this title is by itself so damn poetic.. and the poem is even well expressed.. ur emotions seemto take shape here, which is very good.
Forget all hurts.. theres a life ahead..
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