You came to me in sunshine and in rain,
in winter cold and humid summer heat;
I look for you to come to me again,
and wonder where and when we two shall meet.
These thoughts connect and travel in a train,
an evening reverie of you, my sweet!
How long shall I be waiting, is it vain,
rehearsing words and kisses when we greet?
Our unfulfilled agreements form a chain
that loop and bind around my eager feet;
can you be unaware of causing pain?
If so, your selfishness is near complete.
I grow impatient - you deserve complaints;
I'll harness them to overcome restraints.
Author notes
The Surrey sonnet
In a list
A contest entry
- Sonnet by Surrey: Open to all: Write YOUR sonnet! # 125 by Lyndon.
6000 points, ended October 12, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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Ah, your lovely lines did so impress! Congratulations on the Bronze!
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Thank you NeonRose! Congratulations for your gold, that was an exceptionally lovely sonnet.
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Technically perfect, poet.
The first quatrain establishes the past occurrence and future hope of a love tryst.
The second quatrain is of feeling expressed through inner monologue.
The third quatrain involves love's enslavement (witness the chains) yet the other party could be selfish or insensitive to the other's predicament.
Finally, there is a half-hearted resolution by the love-obsessed one. This is the rhymed couplet.
As this is not the time of Jane Austen but of Surrey, I take it that the fretting one is the male.
Thank you for a frank poem that has a sustained theme and logical progression.
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Forgot these!!
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Quite beautiful! My favorite lines are: "How long shall I be waiting, is it vain,
rehearsing words and kisses when we greet?", and "can you be unaware of causing pain?
If so, your selfishness is near complete." Best to you in the contest!
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Hi, I like this sonnet very much, all the best, kind regards Di
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