Even in darkness,
shadows can be seen
silhouetting soft movement
in the presence of heaven’s lamp.
Even as clouds form pillows
and lie softly upon sky’s mattress,
flushed ribbon ties together
the comforter of night.
Even symphony’s serenade
of wings gliding to touch in cool fall air,
keep beat to beacon’s tiny lights~
calling all to twilight’s shelter.
Even as red eye rises
to see whose love illuminated the dark,
candle’s burn
cannot be extinguished.
Even when stars dance
behind daylight’s blanket
although unseen, they remain~
shining as brilliantly as if in night.
Even as moon fades in the sunrise,
the glisten of its light
will remain on my face~
forever glowing.
…and no one will think it odd.
Author notes
prompt: love is a light itself...unknown.
A contest entry
- a light... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended October 1, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent write
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Why do I feel this has such promise, perhaps a trophy?
You do create such hope in these lines amidst your charming imagery of light in the darkness," even as clouds form pillows upon the sky's mattress" Wow...you are an imagery specialist...I do adore this poem! Bookmarked!
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you made my day... an imagery specialist? i love that.. made me really smile
thanks so much.
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Awe, this is like a soft float on clouds of love...each stanza so well written, but the last line says it all for me...wonder in beauty...may it always be so for you...
Love,
mom
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this was good! definately not my absolute favorite, but still definately worth my time. i liked the ending. it was unique.
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the scenario is sketched with the heart and the beauty of love is crafted with a soulful penning..well done..
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This is probably my personal favorite of your poems. Beautifully rendered in darkness, with hints of a lighted love. It's so good. I love it. It has a carefree tone, like a whisper in the wind. And it's so true, too. For people who actually pay attention, it's so true. The alliteration is subtle but noticeable to the poet's eye. It helps flow and move the emotions intricately. Very very well-written. I'd give you gold.
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So, have you been visiting bedding stores as of late?
Sorry, could not resist...
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haha... no, maybe not sleeping as well as i should has something to do with it though.
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awwww, this is pretty! =D nicely done, as always, hehe
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