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Across The Line

There was once a point

Drawn to a line

Presented to me

Upon a time

 

A time in which

My world stood still

Between a time to love

And a time to kill

 

A time to walk across said line

Where lay a danger oft defined

Where lay a thrill I can't decline

When even an inch I cross the line

 

The greenest grass on the other side

Is riddled with irony

Because the color for which I yearn

Brings naught but agony

 

Tears flow across the line I walk

Of tortured harmony

'Tween the one I love in deep return

And one labeled tragedy

 

True to Eve, as women can be

Tempted by wrong that beckons to me

Something cloaked in red desire

Scorched with flames from a raging fire

 

A sinful meal that many know

Where many fear and dare not go

Where many still consume with glee

The tastiest fruit from the greediest tree

 

It's something I'm not let to resist

Even when I try

Even when it hurts me more

Than my conscience kicked to the side

 

So long my tree still be in sight

Begging me to come along

To just give in and forgo the line

'Tween wanting right and loving wrong

 

My only hope is maybe one day

As a protoge to Eve

She'll find a different heart to hold

Cuz I'll never make her leave

 

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  • Unknowing...
    January 28
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    very good write but i dont see how it fits into my contest sorry


  • Sokarjo
    December 15, 2008

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    Well done! You express the prompt quite well. Your rhythm is catchy, and your thoughts interesting. Good piece! Thanks for entering my contest! :-)


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    November 26, 2008

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    wow speaking of me now this is a damn great poem and the fact you picked the mothers of the very beginning as a great topic for me was a + nice honey i enjoyed you i may have to peek on some more stuff of yours good luck in the contest

  • Vera Rich
    November 24, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my "Celebrating Poetry and Poets" competition. However, you seem to have misunderstood the purpose of it. For your poem makes no mention of either poetry or poets! Maybe the speaker in this poem is intended to represent a poet - but this is not stated in the text itself, and it is on the basis of the text itself that a competition judge must decide. Sorry - but for this competition your entry has to be considered a "non-starter". But I wish you luck with it elsewhere!


  • trekkergirl
    November 22, 2008
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    okay this is an interesting poem... It kept my interest okay. thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • Violinstrings silver member
    November 4, 2008
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    great

    it is wonderfully written decribing a line
    line and life
    do not revise
    it is written very well


  • Violinstrings silver member
    November 4, 2008
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    do not revise

  • trekkergirl
    October 26, 2008

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    Thanks for sharing this poem. It is an interesting and creative read. I like the background. Thanks for entering it into my contest

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