Above these clouds
where light
so shines,
un-obscured by any
our breaths go deep
from here
in Largeness
sometimes sensitivity
forgets a while,
falls under spells
of passing clouds,
waits or tastes distress
in trust or hollow fear.
Yet from above
we see them passing,
already their faces lit
seeing what
and who they are
dispersing,
as we turn
a new smile shines
upon and from
a love so deep
and whole.
In a list
A contest entry
- a light... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended October 1, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere response and critique
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I have felt this before...I know this,...a lovely poem
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yes..you captured the essence and touched the untouched as well.....I love it..well done..and thanks for sharing it...
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Thank you very much for the honour my friend.
Sol
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Perfect.
X
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You are my 'light above the clouds'.
I love you X
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Really like this too! Very beautifully written! Best in contest!
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Thanks Magic... so glad you like it!
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ah i love this one
the lines
sometimes sensitivity
forgets a while,
falls under spells
of passing clouds,
are how i'm feeling right now
your poems always touch my heart <3
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Well I was too for a few moments... but sure enough they passed quickly and completely. Perhaps, sometimes we need to see things in alternative lights.
May they move quickly for you as well, which I'm sure they will...
and thank you
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