Like in the nineteenth century parties
I’ve put this golden mask on my face
And dived into this unknown society
Very confident of not being discovered of whom I am
Yet, from behind the walls I built
I handed them my help
I was as giving as always
Tearing myself from me to save those around
And yet, the masks hided me very well
Until I was considered
Selfish,
Self-centered,
Show of, and
Unloving
But among those some saw right through me
They looked behind the masks
They discovered my hiding place
And they saw how I was
Giving,
Sacrificing,
Loving, and
Caring
And they taught me that the best thing to be
Is being who I am
Author notes
Well, the word I see that fits me is 'Kindest' that's what my friends call me.
I am not sure this is what you've been looking for or no, but I found it very hard to write some poem to talk about how good I am at something. xD
Thanks for reading!
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A contest entry
- If You Were A Word - What Word Would You Be? by Mad Moon.
600 points, ended October 3, 2008, 10 entries
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This is a very strong poem, it is difficult isn't it to talk about one self, but you managed to do it with a certain charm, this created good imagry, and had a good sense of rhythm littlefishone
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This is a wonderfully done poem, my friend. Loved some of the imagery, and the emotion you wove into this. I also enjoyed where you took the prompt! The only thing that caught my eye was the constant switches between tenses. There were also a few misspelled words (i.e. "hided,"dived"). Although, the body of this poem as a whole was very captivating, and I see GREAT promise in your writing! I enjoyed reading this one very much!! Thank you very much for entering, and good luck.
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Very well written
This is an awesome write and yes it is hard to put oneself forward and yet those who finds it hard help others from their heart and will do anything to help another
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kindness
when did this become a bad word.. or considered a weakness?? my motto is
be the love you seek
amen girl great and powerful message you have here in these marvelous words
you have a refreshing wisdom in your writes and i will be keeping an eye on your work
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Thank you! I like your motto and it is a true one, but in society kindess is some times considered as weakness that's why those who are unkind resolve to making use of those who are kind thinking that the later fear them, foolish you might say. Life is such a complicated thing and it's getting more complex by the day, all we can do is hold on to ourselves.
Thanks again for your nice comments.
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SOFT, GENTLE AND TOUCHING!!!!!
Indeed the ones who give and keep on giving find themselves hiding within themselves in todays world. It is the special and understanding person who sees through them to their heart and soul and helps them to be themselves.
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Indeed and I am so happy and fortunate to find some of those who see right through the heart. Thank you!
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