I feel you in my veins
There is no turning back
It's just another day
Wanting what I can't have
I go through the motions
You always follow through
You're the one I've chosen
You know just what to do
You take control of me
You always lead me on
You steal my memories
You make me feel so strong
I need to give you up
I know that you're no good
A substitute for love
I'd leave you if I could
Still I find myself here
Clinging to you so tight
My mind is never clear
Enough to do what's right
Author notes
prompt: addiction
A contest entry
- Strength or Weakness by ScarsFade.
375 points, ended October 3, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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The image behind this piece was very intriguing. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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this is just beautiful...in such a sick, sad way. you did a wonderful job writting it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck.
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I know how you feel lol. Good write.
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this is a sweet aswome write. nice job. love it. it reminds me so much of being with the girl/guy thats right now not mr right like so many do. i loved the rhyme and flow also. sweetness for sure.
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Excellent
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine. Thank you for sharing this on with us. Again, well done. -
Been there ,and, yes a very good description
of how it feels, and yes such a easy way to ease the pain, make a person find joy for one night and even escape from the crazy things in this world for one day, and your poem showed the feeling in words as the film , 'Leaving Las Vegas showed in acting how alcohol can affect you in many different ways. Both your poem and the film deserve the same accolades for the real connection, thanks good read, and well changed but was hard.
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I personally cannot relate to this poem, but I know of many who would. Such reality you have painted here with your words, and a great job you've done on the subject matter. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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I like the sincerity in this piece. The fact that you described your addiction as a weakness that needs to be dropped is great. I love how you wrote the truth and that you were able to realize it. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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I don't know what to say except that I like everything about this. The subject matter I really relate to; the rhyme and flow are great and I even like your user name
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I absolutely love the alliteration you have used in your title. To be honest, I was hoping to find more of that poetic form in the poem itself.
I also like the fact that you managed to describe the addiction to something... Very well done!
Thank you for entering the contest,
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i like the same thing that lead you to do the right things but my favorit is the Rhum do you like it ??? -
Hiding the bitter pain in a bottle, so one finds that the only true love is the one we need to escape...lovely personification...thank you for sharing.
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This is certainly...interesting. Thanks for entering
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To much of it kills brain cells
I've never been an alcoholic, still I know what it's like to be trapped by such temptation. My father was one and I know many who are. When I was younger I got drunk a few times, ok more like 20 times or so. The point is I wanted to experience the feeling because I didn't want to feel left out. To this day I can't understand why people want to get so drunk they spew and spew and spew. To me that's not a good feeling. Your poem is well written about ones battle with the bottle, and there lies half the battle, being able to write about it can only help to give you strength.
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so true
As you read in my one poem, I have been through this before, have felt those same feelings. It takes a while to pull through, but seeing the need for change and the strength to get through it is sometimes all that is needed. Hope you are doing okay now, and I'm not saying your an alcoholic or trying to make assumptions, but if you ever need to talk, or just want to chat with someone who's been through the similar stuff, or just wants some one to listen, I'm here. Just drop me a line and ill give you my aim or my yahoo chat.
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Thank you so much. I don't have yahoo, but if you want to send me your aim name it would be nice to talk sometime. Mine is RestlessDreamer7. Again, thank you!
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hey, no prob. And any time you wanna talk just grab me om AIM, my screen name is LADYsingthBLUES, and yes the typo is supposed to be there lol. Hope to hear from you soon!
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Do you have support such as AA?
Wishing you all the best
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I could go if I wanted to. My mom goes every other Sunday and said I can go with her anytime I want. Right now I'm doing ok quitting on my own. Most of my problems are that I get irritated and annoyed easily when I drink so I end up depressed and upset with my fiancee when he didn't do anything wrong. I don't normally drink much, it happens even if I only have one drink. For now I am going to see how I do on my own not drinking. It hasn't necessarly been that much of a problem yet. I like drinking, but I know it's not worth loosing my fiancee. Other than that I don't really have any issues with it. I never get drunk or pass out or anything. It's more just that I got so used to drinking, not that I can't stop.
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you are a very good poet. so many have fought the same battles. please, for yourself and your family, kill this addiction. i know you can do it. if you can write a poem like this, i know you can stop drinking. if you ever need anyone to talk to, you can message me.
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OMG.....dead on....freakin right on the money. That's everything if not more that i have felt. I loved this intensly the way you wrote it, was real simple and just amazing. Gosh you have quite the talent my favorite line here is,"I feel you in my veins
There is no turning back." I intensly remember that feeling....keep up those amazing words...scars.
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Wow you really nailed the battle many have fought with alcohol or other drugs. This is a wonderful write. Flows very well and has superb imagery. Thank you!
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This is beautiful. I could almost hear music behind it. It flowed so well. Good luck on the contest Hope you win!
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Great luck with stopping. I can't imagine how hard it will be, but can imagine how happy the people in your life will be about having the real you back with them. I have seen how alcohol can affect a person, and you did a great job explaining this. I liked your rhyme a lot as well.
Great write you have here!
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Oh, wow. I hope that you find the strength to overcome this, and by writing this I think you are well on your way. It was well written, and the rhyme worked very well. Best of luck.
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I hope that you do overcome your barrier! Praying that everything will go well for you during your time.
The poem it self was wonderful..great rhyme and rhytmn.
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Thank you for the inspirational comment! I wrote a little about my story pertaining to this below if you're interested in reading it.
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Sure! I 'll have to look it up!
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God, I love that you KNOW that.
They say it's the first step, well, it actually is. You cannot deal with a problem if you don;t recognize it's there.
It's the hardest battle too, admitting defeat, facing yourself.
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. I do know that I definitely need to stop drinking, but it's not necessarily as big of a problem as it could be. I just need to stop before it gets to that point. I have often been concerned as to whether or not I'm an alcoholic. I am still not sure. I hate being drunk and I have no problem stopping. It's just that when I do drink I get very emotional in a bad way. I get irritated way to easily and argue constantly with my fiancee. Then I cry almost uncontrollably for a couple of hours. Sometimes that happens if I only have 1 or 2 drinks. It almost caused us to break up. That's when I knew I needed to do something before it got to the point where I couldn't stop. Thanks again!
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