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Velocity Black Hole

Nothing more concrete
Than when you eat swan meat
Not raw
No more wheat
Not sin
Nor a song
Not for love
Nothing in the end
Then you will meet
D-Feat
Nothing more concrete
Than when you eat swan meat
Not raw
No more wheat
Not sin
Nor a song
Not for love
Nothing in the end
Then you will meet
D-Feat
Nothing more concrete
Than when you eat swan meat
Not raw
No more wheat
Not sin
Nor a song
Not for love
Nothing in the end
Then you will meet
D-Feat

Nothing More Concrete

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  • lunarlunacy
    September 22, 2008

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    I knew eventually I would find where the abstractions of deviance were hiding, taunting, and rebel-rousing.
    This write almost reminds me of Captain Beefheart. Good stuff.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    September 21, 2008

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    Welcome to wonderland, that is the first phase that came to mind, cause it reads like something from that book, but i know i love it, keep it flowing my friend.


  • unavailable
    September 18, 2008

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    I like how the rhythm spilled down the page.
    I like how the poem ripples like little waves down the side.
    I enjoyed reading this though I'm not sure it made a great deal of sense.