Regretting all the past years,
wishing I could fill them up with you.
Erase all the heartbreaks,
and replace them with a kiss or two.
Delete the night of forsaken lust,
Fill in the lines with your love and trust.
Give away all the tears and depression,
color them up with your whispered love confession.
Id tear up your memory of emptiness,
And write in new words filled with happiness.
Paint a picture, to display my love, a new.
cover up the memories, and create brighter
ones of me and you.
But still you seem so hurt by your past.
Your head has been filled with lies and hate.
I only wish I could take it away.
I only wish I could erase every painful day.
Our hearts have been scarred with pain,
and it may forever last.
But we must begin to move on,
and finally erase the past.
Author notes
love can heal the world
A contest entry
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thats so true baby... I really liked this one.. I'm so sorry for dong what I did, I had no business.. Last thing I wanna do is hurt you mama. I love u
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Beautiful write! I really enjoyed reading it. I loved the emotions portrayed! I loved the words and the overall flow of the poem was superb. Thank you for sharing
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Wow. That was absolutely beautiful. I loved it. The flow, the rhyme, the emotion, the imagery. Excellent write.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Give away all the tears and depression,
color them up with your whispered love confession.
This was good rhyme
the poem was good over all but remember to challenge yourself when it comes to rhyme try a rhyming poems that has equal lines and more complex rhyme shemes
check out Shadowpoetry.com
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yes, love can heal the world...
that said, i liked this poem, it flows beautifully, and bears a lot of truth...
heartbreak sucks... anyone who knows anything has felt it... but i have developed the opinion that it is also crucial to truly living life...
how to say it... it is better to have loved and lost than to have not loved at all, yes...
but it is even better to have loved, lost, and loved again right, right?
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I understand this poem all to well, the emptyness I feel it. But yes moving on is best, your work is powerful and expresses how I feel right now.
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