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I Choose To Be Free

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With trembling legs, she climbs into bed,
already dreading tonight and all the insults
he will attack her with, simply because
he thinks she can’t do anything right.
The Egyptian sheets, tainted the color of milk,
cuddle her almost completely exposed body.
A clock ticks disapprovingly somewhere in the room,
as she focuses on the wall and its ugly brown texture.
In a way, the wallpaper resembled her body in his eyes:
unexciting, stained, just another piece of scenery in his life.
Her heart begins to beat irregularly as his shadow climbs across the ceiling,
pushing her rather callously over so he can join her underneath the covers.
She moves her hand onto his face, ready to caress,
but he shakes it off, an aggravated look in his vicious eyes.
He rolls over so his back is facing her, cutting her off from the love she’s always craved,
but he’s never been kind enough to give.
Slowly she gets up, slipping on a skimpy black robe.
Once again, she has opened herself up, eager to give him all that was hers.
Once again, he chose to look away, shutting down her heart,
making it clear she could never be anyone he wanted.

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Picture Credit: “Her Time”
~ Steve Hanks
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  • perfectsunset gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    Wow this was so deeply emotional
    and very powerful the words you
    used to express such terrible feeling.
    This broke my heart, as I've felt this
    way before, and it's one of the worst.
    You put so much depth into your words-
    making this a very beautiful poem
    and one i'm sure many women
    can relate to.

    Brilliant write.

    Thanks for sharing & best of luck


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    WOW

    This was emotionally engaging and took the reader on an in-depth ride into this female's pain. This was an amazing poem.


  • new born
    September 26, 2008

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    So sad...the picture, um, suprised me, but once I got down to the bottom lines I got how it went with the poem. This is a painful, beautiful write. Your choice of words was exquisite and the imagery was heart-wrenching.


  • Ignored
    September 26, 2008

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    Wow this was just a hands down amazing write. I love your choice of words and such imagery was displayed throughout this poem. Pain and deep emotion were heavily set in the words of this poem and I love it. Keep up the amazing work and I am looking forward to sseing more of your incredible poems!


  • innocence jaded.xx
    September 20, 2008

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    WOW. This was amazinggg hoe. I didn't know you could write like this ! WOW. I am in complete utter awe by every word you wrote in this poem. Honestly, haha, this was incredibleee.

    -The Egyptian sheets, tainted the color of milk,
    cuddle her almost completely exposed body.
    A clock ticks disapprovingly somewhere in the room,
    as she focuses on the wall and its ugly brown texture.
    In a way, the wallpaper resembled her body in his eyes:
    unexciting, stained, just another piece of scenery in his life.
    ...

    Ohkay, so I absolutely LOVED the imagery in those lines & your use of metaphors. You are insanely talented, hoe. I love how you portrayed that picture. Beautiful :] The rest of the poem was just mind-boggling, too. It was like while I was reading it, I could picture was going on in my mind, and not many people can do that. Wonderfully written, hoe ! Keep it upppp ! Iloveyouuu ♥

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