sashaying amber flame,
hips hug humidity -
slick and tight against its rhythm;
heavy as a dream
she swayed hypnotic;
tidal undulation danced
like moonlight on my
waves
there was that lunar gleam
and then we were
naked
Author notes
Prompt: We'll see
20-50 words
In a list
A contest entry
- Overnighter Picture Prompt(s) Contest. by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended September 18, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Review Desired
Comments
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Hood-Wink!
I was so drawn into the first line I almost couldn't get past it to read the rest
Such a powerfully penned poem that is so beautiful and amazing
Congrats on the Gold
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Ohhh.. love the build up to that ending!!
You're on fire my friend!! You may have to build a bigger trophy cabinet
Gorgeous poem! Congrats!
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excellent
Such a great take on the prompt. So very well done. Congrats on the gold.
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congrats, Marty..
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thanx!
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ooOOh... what a sensual little sensation this poem is!!!
Your second stanza spead my heart a bit.
Well done and thank you for you wonderful entry in my contest.
Delila
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well done my dear friend xx my fav part was the second stanza as so much imagery was spilling out in the brevity of the write. well done and many blessings always xxx
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well done...short and to the point. The rythm and flow combine with the imagery to give the reader a sense of voyer-ity. Well done.
Shadows Guard You.
DW
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we were?
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Awesome use of words again you have penned in this beautiful sensual poem .
You brought her to life as you viewed her
Best wishes as always
Love Auntie xx
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"she swayed hypnotic;
tidal undulation danced
like moonlight on my
waves"
omg. this is so beautiful
you better win I love the ending...
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Very nicely done, my best wishes in the contest.
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Can't wait to read!!
PS. you have a groovy voice!!
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'groovy'?
My adjective! Dammit... LMAO
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best wishes my dear friend
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Thank you!
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