The state of ecstasy I find in you,
with ev'ry caress you love me too much.
The velvet lips that leave the trails of dew,
as senses roll to Merlot scented touch.
Your light that shines to end this ceaseless night,
my darkened soul so long belied your call.
Angel of grace your hand renewed the fight,
my heart returns to freedom's divine fall.
My queen of love, she stands inside my dreams,
my nightmares fade to lover's promised kiss.
The fires still rage, incite my vengeful screams,
as demons grasp released my flight to bliss.
My angel of my dark heart stay with me,
to hold me close in this my hell on earth.
I'm bound with chains no eyes will ever see,
a cherished love of laughter, joy and mirth.
Author notes
OK don't faint or owt, its a love poem... sort of. Had to put demons in there to save my sanity.
A contest entry
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this is very good. i like the touch of darkness thrown in to keep a balance and make it not seem like a "OMG I love this person so much, i'm like addicted" poem. I write like that come to think of it. I'm glad you entered this.Good luck.
Sarah
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Loved your entry here. It is very well written and has just enough dark to accent the love...Wonderful.
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Very nice rhyme and flow to this, little heavy with the filler words IMO but other than that a beautiful poem. I can relate to the need for demons
They find thier way into a lot of mine to. Smoothly done, good luck 
Score: 96.5
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Again....lots of *Show*....but...not much *telling* going on.....try to balance a little of both for a well-structured write ~
nice write
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Thanks Bear
This is where the artist kicks back in me, never reveal anything let the viewer draw their own conclusions and art being my first creative bent it will win every time as I tighten up and can't write Jack and Jill. I will keep trying
Jem
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again you always seem to present the flawless rhyme and flow I was certain existed no longer Well done, nice theme and well played through your words. It is expressed with love. ummm... interesting
nice job!
Mel
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Now that is a comment I must show Jeff, he's been through hell and back getting any rhyme, flow and meter into my head... Thank you at last the battle is paying off... 'til tomorrow and I can't again
Jem
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Bloody Hell!
Welcome to my world
NOT BAD!!!
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Oh Jems
this is butiful
Thankyou so much
Forever with You
xxx Your angel xxx
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