I am Venus
I am Love and Passion,
and they are me.
And yet when I laid eyes on you,
I was ensnared by your beauty...
Together, My Passion,
and your Beauty and Love,
we will give way to all our hungry desires;
together we will love, kiss, seduce and touch.
By the sea,
under the rain,
on the grass,
everywhere we can think of,
our passions will talk
and the wind, water, earth and fire
will all speak of US!
Your kiss,
your fingertips,
your heart,
your everything,
combined with mine..
I am Venus
and together,
We are Passion incarnate!
by: Nada Adel Sobhi
Author notes
this poem is inspired by "Venus": http://allpoetry.com/poem/4404607
by Venus25
In a list
A contest entry
- Rewrite My Prewrite by Venus25.
300 points, ended September 21, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well done, Nada! It's a marvelous piece....passionate, imaginative and inspiring!
I like the ideas, the straightforward manner you put the things. An excellent write, sweet love!
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I love the wording in this!
The love, the passion.
It was just so intense.
Imagery was used perfectly- And I really enjoyed this.
Nice work.
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Very beautiful poem!
It was sensual and just so lovely!!!
"By the sea,
under the rain,
on the grass,
everywhere we can think of,
our passions will talk
and the wind, water, earth and fire
will all speak of US!"
This was my favorite part. The words and emotions were extremely incredible here.
Amazing. :]
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Once again something beautiful I can't help but imagine the two of us.
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Nice job. You really put a lot of feeling and passion into this piece and told the tale beautifully.
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Such vivid imagination. I liked how you pictured the love and combained its emotions with nature elements.
"by: Nada Adel Sobhi" Your name is arabic, does this mean you are from an arabic country?
Again very enjoyable write.
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The sheer romantics of Venus her self inhabits this fine crafted verse.
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Wow
I liked this poem a lot, very loving, almost like first love. My favorite part is
"By the sea,
under the rain,
on the grass,
everywhere we can think of"
Reminds me of when my husband I first got together, lol. Great write and good luck in the contest
~*~Zenity
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I like it. It says love.
"and the wind, water, earth and fire
will all speak of US!" - awesome line.
You done good.
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I love it, it is superb that is the style i love
yes I am Venus, this is great, lovely and the style i love using, but you put it here in an incredible way, full of dignity, self assurance as well as love and you made the whole earth your bed. beautiful beautiful writing my deat VENUS
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awesomeness
*By the sea,
under the rain,
on the grass,
everywhere we can think of,
our passions will talk
and the wind, water, earth and fire
will all speak of US!*
I thought this part was absolutely terrific! *our passions will talk* is genius for this subject matter, truly a beautiful , creative write.
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How dare you!
I am so jealous.... you beautiful clever poet!
Everything about this is stunning, I love the way it reads!
By the sea,
under the rain,
on the grass,
everywhere we can think of,
our passions will talk
and the wind, water, earth and fire
will all speak of US!
This is my favourite stanza... it's cute and witty!
Thank you so much for this
Much admiration...
Bravo, bravo
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