Verse:
I’m sitting here in Your world,
Like dust that’s taking space.
It came to me, memories of good,
If I’ll ever see Your face.
I heard my voice’s tone.
Talkin’ ‘bout You a like an old friend.
Soundin’ like I’m so alone.
I just want this to end.
Chorus:
I’m the one who walked away,
While You stood Your ground.
Inside I feel a need to pray;
A sheep that wants to be found.
Verse:
I’ve got no reason to be breathing.
I don’t know why I’m here.
I feel my own skin is reeling.
I think I heard a bird jeer.
I thought I heard a voice sighing.
It wasn’t me, I looked around.
I could swear the clouds were crying.
It seems I’m not the saddest sound.
Repeat Chorus
© 9-17-08
Author notes
This is meant as encouragement by way of a kind of reverse-psychology, saying, "Don't slip, you'll hurt His feelings..."
I'm good now, but I've been there a few times. 
Please tell me what you think
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sad
it is so sad, simple, and good. i liked it and enjoyed reading it. my favourite part :
" could swear the clouds were crying.
It seems I’m not the saddest sound."
so effective and shows a great talent. I just think it's missing something. but this something is not to be written, but to be felt.(no offence)
anyway, you deserve a bow,
well done
sherry
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No offense taken...
The fact it made you feel sad is a complement to my efforts.
I bow in return.
Thank you!
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I like this very much. It's simple, yet effective. Very similar to my most commonly used and favorite poetry writing style. Nicely done
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Very good write here
Penned very well and with a hidden voice inside keep up the good work
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I think that's what I find fun about this one and a couple of others that I have here: the hidden voice; the message behind the message.
I appreciate you're comment and seeing what seems to be here.
God bless!
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