How you gentle me
when I would dance
and twirl around your eyes
until you fall dizzy
into the warmth of me
you hold my shoulders
and I melt where I stand
into the tenderness
of your hand
and in your face I see
all the years of us
Author notes
A contest entry for: One more Quickie contest!
1 Hour Quickie ~ Winner take ALL!
PROMPT = QUOTE & ART
50 words or less!
Picture: Courtesy Poetryality.
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A contest entry
- One more Quickie contest! 1 Hour by poetryality.
300 points, ended September 18, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love this poem!! It has such a snese of love!! You did a great job wiht this poem!! Keep up the great work! Jess
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Second poem I read from you about dance and again so much tenderness. Lots to enjoy here while music plays.
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What tenderness spills onto the page from your pen. Beautiful! Some very fluid lines are written here poet. Thank you so much for this lovely entry. I wish you well in the contest.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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very sweet expression of enduring love.
''and in your face I see
all the years of us''
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excellent flow to these words and the images they invoke.
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Very beautiful imagery, a beautiful story told in so few words. amazing
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This is a very beautiful poem! Very emotional, and true. It seems like you wrote this straight from your heart. Good luck in the contest you entered.
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Beautiful!!
I love the imagery in this write... And i do have to agree with Rachel this write is I think close to the ultimate seduction. I love this so much!! Thank you for this write.. and good luck!!
~*Cristy*~ -
Excellent take on the picture prompt! Liked the "dance" & "twirl" @until you fall dizzy" - the ultimate seduction!
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Awww it's so sweet and beautifully written. When I read it, I feel warm and soft. It flows wonderfully and is very descriptive for so few words
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