"Tis a day like no other" said Chippy to Sal
he knew she would go... for Sal was his gal
He’d planned a great venture into the unknown
a highway to freedom, a skaters paved throne
They waited and watched each car as it zoomed
not knowing the road was an ultimate doom
He’s ready to ride on his board cross the street
but Sally told Chippy “I’ll just use my feet”
So Chippy took off and weaved through the cars
he made his debut he captured his star
Now was Sals turn, so she readied to walk
but in a quick instance... snatched-up by a hawk
In a list
A contest entry
- 2 hour contest something funny please by queen.
300 points, ended September 17, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well Done !!
Congratulations on the well-deserved Gold!!
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Waah! That's hilarious! I kept thinking she'd get run over by a car, but the way you ended it is completely unexpected and awesome! I think that in the first stanza though, it would be better if you put his words in quotes like you did with Sally's in the second stanza
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tyty for the comment and the help
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Nice write. Best of luck in the contest.
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lol! too funny! best of luck!
Slayer
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thanks
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Oh poor little Sal
very cute and imaginative thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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thank you
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