Hurtling through the stratosphere en route from planet X,
came three grey skinned humanoids Volno Clou and Lex.
On leaving base were briefed about conditions here on earth
how primitive earthlings were of much heavier girth
The further information they didn’t expect at all,
as their”Saucer” hurtled on and they started to recall.
That millions inhaled smoke from some obnoxious weed,
to break this drug addiction,not many can succeed.
Governments supposed by taxing up it’s price,
they’d cut down on addiction it just did not suffice.
They increased it every year, on it they soon relied,
attempts to ban it’s import they never even tried.
Their strange transport poisons all the atmosphere,.
the fuel comes from oil which is going short they fear.
The tax on that’s horrendous sends prices up all round
the tax is used for nuclear weapons is their logic sound ?
They say that they won’t use them, they’re just for defence,
it’s really mutual annihilation, the death of commen sense.
They dress young men in uniforms teach them how to kill,
send them out across the sea to murder at their will.
If they prove successful in slaughtering their foe,
and manage to stay in one piece, they stand them in a row.
To get a heroes welcome a medal on their chest,
to commit such deeds in civvy street they’d be under arrest.
They destroy the worlds rain forests,and speed the earth’s demise,
to make paper,for their adverts so their sales will rise.
They stuff them in letter boxes a mirriad tons each day,
send a waggon burning diesel to take them all away.
Goods are produced by the many, owned only by the few,
through the law of supply and demand such a heavy brew.
The more the goods are wanted the higher goes the price,
which lowers purchasing power so wages don’t suffice.
With wages then inadequate the goods accumulate,
which leads to unemployment a problem so innate.
The boss rests on his laurels he can afford the time to wait,
while the men who made his money are locked outside his gate.
Lex said on reflection, let’s go home,this is no joke,
before this raving madhouse goes up in nuclear smoke.
Clou said let’s put this goddam Saucer into gear,
we've had enough you guys,let's get the hell outa here.
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Author notes
JUDMC
A contest entry
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lol, interesting point of view. thank you for your entry. Goodluck.
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Long, but I liked this! it is one of my favorite entries so far! Interesting and read well.
Your spell-check missed a few words:
stratosphere
obnoxious
annihilation
welcome
I would edit those, as I feel this write is worthy of being 'spell perfect'....lol
As I stated, this is one of my favorite entries. Best wishes in the contest.
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aboomer
Many thanks for your helpful comments on "The Greys"
glad you liked it.I have corrected the misspelt words
and it looks much better now.In mitigation since I
took the German language on board my spelling has
become phonetic,which as you know is fatal in English
especially with my northern (British) accent
Best Wishes and Kind Regards George -
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I know some people complain their spell-check misses a lot - and that they don't realize it themselves unless someone says something......I also know that other countries spell words differently......which is fine with me. I sometimes mention the spelling, if I think the write is good, because to me it detracts from the quality/presentation of that write. And I myself, would want to know on my writes if I have a mis-spelled word.
It's not anything I "require" that someone change, I just like to let them know in case they didn't realize.
best wishes
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Ok for me this was way too long. Attention span only covers around three words max. But the beginning is wonderful and I can see to where you are going with it. It reminds me of something someone showed me of what would happen if God told Noah to build the Ark in today's society. haha it's quite a laugh. Anyways. This is, from what I read, quite sensational. Wonderful.
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Thnx for your entry, a really good piece, but unfortunatly a bit longer than 30 lines.
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A clever way to get your views across ina basiclly non-threatening way. I laughed at the last couple lines...cute!
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Powerful write. Made me think of society. I liked the part of a lot of goods being produced, but only a few people owning the goods. It makes me think of how there is so much food in the world and of how sad it is when leftover food is tossed out in the garbage when there are people in the third world starving. This poem also gives a good perspective of what grays might think of if and when they were to ever come to planet Earth. I wonder if you have heard of the talk of this ufo supposedly to come to Earth in October, apparently on the 14th. It's some psychic story, so I'm not sure how much credibility it has, but I'm planning to watch the skies, anyway. Thanks for sharing this piece. Best of luck in the contest.
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sounds like the new planet is hell! god let's run from that one! well thanks for writing. it is a wonderful piece. good luck in the contest
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