Taking in the looks
Of the one that I loved
I could love no other.
When you talked to me,
Touched me, its like non-other
On the journey together,
Forever.
You light the room
With the glow
Like a thousand moons.
Heavenly and soft.
When your not with me
It feels like an eternity
Lonely and cold.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Short, sweet, simple.
I liked this poem a lot.
Great write! -
I like the form and the regularity of the lines. That's what really struck.
There's a typo in the title. I think it should be "once loved"
jjj -
I love stanza three
You light the room
With the glow
Like a thousand moons.
Heavenly and soft.
fantastic and romantic
a bit different from you.
cassie
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oooh you light the room with the glow like a thousand moons, ah i envy the person you wrote this for!!
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