I feel like shit
She looks like gold.
I’m dying in the gutters,
On the beach she lives or so I am told.
Liquor has eaten up my liver and made me a walking disease,
Still I spend my days always at the liquor store,
Always drinking bottles away,
Always begging for more.
I have a child but never can see her,
I had a wife but I took the wrong turn,
I had a family that loved me,
In my eyes this loss does burn.
I cannot let go and I cannot be set free,
From this curse that has captured me,
Let me die a helpless man
That’s all I’ll ever be, that is all I am.
Please tell me what you think
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This is a very powerful piece of writing that
really captures the depths of mans despair, and
the tragedy that we bring upon ourselves. -
WAW
I love this poem... I got sucked in as soon as i started reading it.
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wow. you capture the sadness of this situation very well. it's sad when people are reduced to this because they cannot overcome their addiction. great write!
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This is a sad poem. It shows the hopelessness of a man that has made mistakes and can see no road back. I think I have known him. I could really feel his feelings here. Great work! Best of luck to you in all things!
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so sad
this is such a sad poem, but it's so well written, it tells such a powerful story so many people just walk past people who are begging on the streets, but they are people, i love the third stanza it makes the character in this so real, alcoholism is a scary, scary disease
this actually reminds me of a homeless man who was killed in a hit and run where i'm from and they still haven't found the person who killed him great poem!
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i agree, no one is helpless. look in the right place and you'll find hope
but very well written i must dd.
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No one is helpless. It sounds like the character in the poem has made a few bad choices and just needs to work hard on getting back on track. It's sad when families get broken apart because of misunderstandings.
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