The End of Every Bleeding soul
Confides in the veil of a black hole
Forbidding any light to shine upon
the face of pain which has been put on
So full of living fear
of being sentenced
To a death so near
Replacing every tear of joy with that of pain
On the pillow of hollowness rested its power
only to drive all people insane
with a restricted mind locked in a high tower
My heart beats to the rhythm of pain
in its lair,hiding in vain
Author notes
this is about the pain everyone feels...and how it resides in every nook consisting of no joy or peace!!
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wow great poem it sounded like my poem trapped but so much shorter and too the point...i like that...good luck.
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This is a great poem, good work.
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Nice poem, I like how it rhymes
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I love your topic; I know this kind of pain as does everyone who has ever felt depressed or had that black hole in them. You related these emotions wonderfully and in great flow with imagery.
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Great job...this is a very interesting poem, though I wonder...what Option number did you pick? PLease add that...it makes things so much easier....
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