"to be your friend was all I ever wanted; to be your lover was all I ever dreamed."
I waited for you to notice me
In the hall, the streets, my dreams
I ached to know your secrets
A friendship, grounded, true
I longed to be your lover
And in my dreams, that wish came true
Holding you in my arms
I could stay in this place forever
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sometimes.. in my dreams is the only place I see you.... You fulfilled my dreams.. and now I live in them..... biding for one more moment with you...
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I like this a lot. I think that the brevity of it makes it stronger, that, along with the fact that so many of us have lived these thoughts. You made us feel it and gave it a happy ending. Nice job.
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this poem was very nicely worded. no revisions here!!!!!
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sour/sweetly done...I liked it immensely. Dreams are the stuff that reality SHOULD be made of.
Enjoyed it!
Smile♫
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a fundamental case for longing. very sweet, lightly coated in sad. you have a grey shade to your work and frankly me likes it
still too soon for brilliant but again you are making a strong case for it with every read.
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This was a quicky! It's a few words to satisfy my need to put words on the screen.
Thank you for your comment!
Criss
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This poem makes me go thats so true! after every line. its a beautiful bitter sweet romance of dreams. I love it. and i agree with poetryality in saying that it made me sigh!
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With these emotions intact I can easily see how I'd get stuck and stay asleep for a long while. This poem makes me sigh. I know this peace. Beautiful!
Thank you for the entry and the best to you in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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