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[Deathless] Love

yes, my love
come to me
in the pitch of night.
your pulse trembles...
what an intoxicating smell.

sweet lather upon porcelain skin,
I watch you succumb to your fears.
I'm only a shadow away
in darkened cloak

My love, sweet flesh to thine eyes
[dont scream]
as your light becomes my night.

I pull you in...
fingers linger over glowing perks
then up, around bare neck

My sweet,
how your pulse quickens,
your heart pumping sweet wine
through your viens.

Your breath a studder
as I whisper
[let me keep you]

A mere whimper,
as my index finds
your sweet nector.

oh, to sense pure desire
under such dismay.

With this, I sink into you
sipping upon your crimson mortality.

My love,
You give into me with pleasure
as you slip into my forever...


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Ambrea

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  • RazorbladeKiss14
    September 14

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    This is a very good poem! Very intense!!! I loved it!!1 Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!!!


  • skilter
    August 30
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    very beautifully penned, thank you for entering!


  • tears.of.silence
    May 30

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    Stunning and absolutely beautiful. I loved how this was done. You have won many trophies before and I can see why. Excellent work. You've been added to the finalist list. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. Kahy


  • XxAcidicDreamzxX
    April 11

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    WOW!

    I really love this poem, So beautifuly done You are very talented thanks for entering this contest and best of luck


  • ShiningNShadows
    December 14, 2008

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    Wow, I really like this. The word choice and layout isvery well done. Nice job! Good luck and thanks for entering!


  • Upon Deaths Meeting
    September 25, 2008

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    I really loved this entire poem. I think that your flow, wording and meaning was just amazingly well put to words with this one and I look forward to reading more of your stuff... but probably tomorrow, though.

    I especially loved the last verse because it was so deep--literally and metaphorically. I think that you are a wonderful poet and you definitely deserve someone and things that understand you.

    Keep up the great work, Amber. I think that you are a very talented writer and you show it with both your stories and poems.


  • November-Dani
    September 17, 2008

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    Oh yes, this is what Im looking for. Very well done, i realy enjoyed reading it.
    Thank you for entering and best of luck.
    Dani.


    • A m b r e a
      September 17, 2008
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      Thank you, this subject really inspired me! It was a fun write!

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