Laughter and joy
Marinating in a happiness,
That explodes
In an enveloping baby
Blue blanket.
Caressing my soul.
I was enriched
With your presence.
And today I
Hunger for it.
But just yesterday
I seen eternity
carved
On your yellow heart,
Etched in pearls
That no longer luster.
A confusing frame in
The film of life.
Its evident death resided
In the echelons of your senses.
Shit you smelled
Through out life
Overwhelmed and destroyed
Your defense mechanisms.
You had to surrender.
Fury is my blood
As gates of mixed emotions
Rage outward
At every thought of you.
Feelings manifested by your end.
You coward!
******Laughter******
Certainly you do!
I,
Condemned as a helpless entity.
Lost in unbearable loneliness,
amidst a dark blue murky sea.
I suffer this
While you waddle in death,
FREE.
You deserted me.
My dead friend (best).
Author notes
A dear friend told me of a sad story of suicide. I wrote this in thinking how i would feel if my best friend were to leave in such a way.Guruist/Gigolo
Written January 21st, 2004
A contest entry
- Best Friends by PoetBoy2008.
1100 points, ended June 4, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Life Sucks (rounds contest) by SoftlyScreaming.
600 points, ended July 12, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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well its a good thing you followed the rules.. this wasnt my favorite piece out of the bunch, but it has meaning, and i like meaning.. plus it sorta kinda rhymed.. i love rhyme.. keep it up
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pretty good keep it up.
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Star of all comments ive read yours is the most touching. After reading it i felt good about writing this poem. Though i find extreme pleasure and relief in writing i also enjoy that another can be released from my work. so please allow me to thank you for feeling me which is an honor. Also I send my deepest condolences for your lost and pray that it is a one time experience. Continue to be beautiful and express it each and everday. Terrell
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That is what I love about you so much. You understand me and you don't just listen to me, you feel me.
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Wonderful
this is very intense write. Maybe I'm just weird but I was watching Hamlet not too long ago and this seems like a speech that he would say (Shakespear would write). It's full of meaning and just has that feeling. I read it twice, and loved it both times. I hope to read more soon.
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this was really good i dont know what i do if my best freinds killed them selves as to how i would feel if they did i would be mad at them an at the say time extrmly hurt that they would do that the way u expressed ur feelings in this poem was amazing
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This is beautiful.. a calm, stilling sort of pain and sad in the beginning, then progressing to a more violent pain at the end. I liked that transition. Theres some beautiful phrases in here as well.. 'marinating in a happiness' .. 'etched in pearls that no longer luster'.. 'echelons of your senses' .. just wonderful.
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applaud
Oh love, I find myself in tears as each and every word, line was processed in my mind and tossed about....I didn't need to read your comment you know what you spoke here to me about...well, to know what you were writing about. I don't think you'd believe me if I were to show you just how achy my body is right now...words cannot express this... My best friend I almost lost, I think about it how life would be without him and I get so choked up and blinded by a fury of tears along with questions like how could you, what were you thinking, why and will things ever be okay? So many more questions, but I'd rather not have you waste your time reading about my experience...
What people are so faint to see is that they are worth every fiber that binds and holds them together making them who they are. That no matter what they think there's no one who is just like them, everyone is so different and is fighting their own battles everyday. Death isn't worth the attempts or thoughts of planning how, where, and when. You write proves how hopless people can be, but with just a few words you can help complete that person making them see who will miss them also what things are waiting somewhere down this path called life undiscovered... Thanks for sharing this write... You have lots to say, share, teach and learn from yourself and others... This piece is a wonderful example of it... Your words were caught too well, it's scary, no offense..but I just find myself in pain reading this...An emotion I haven't yet felt today...So thanks again and take care of yourself...
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