Winters chill
claimed his soul
time elapsed
sweet
kissed goodbyes,
…sadly not shared
Author notes
http://ladyshamisen.deviantart.com/art/Wandering-Child-52763049
13 words
In a list
A contest entry
- 13 words by AutumnGypsy.
450 points, ended September 25, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love how it's so dark! You did well!
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wow... you pack a punch in such a small handful of words. Well done. Let it suffice to say that I know the feeling.
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Thank you, and im sorry you know that feeling, not a good one
Cindy
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Sad sad sad...mhm, but so beautiful at the same time, excellent job my dearest sister! Peace n' Love, JT
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This is a sad little piece, when two do not share the same grief. Best to you in the contest
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13 words that bring animation to the prompt and understanding to the reader... well done.
K
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Thanks Uncle Ken
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outstanding take on the prompt. It would make an excellent epitath for the headstone
Joe
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wonderfily done sis
i love you -
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Thanx SIssy, Lov U
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Beautiful write to the prompt hun, captured it magically glad to have you back here
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its good to be back , thanx darl
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This is an amazing take on the prompt! So dark!
Best of luck in the contest
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thanx, my slave
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Ooh gave me the chills sis!
Great little piece you penned
here in only 13 words;
amazing.
Best of luck
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Thanx SiS, that makes me feel good, i wasnt sure about it, if it came across enough, but you made me feel better bout it hehe
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Liked this cuz, wonder if 'winter's chill' should be on its own line? More impact...it's chilly to read this and poignant too. Good luck C
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thanks Cuz, am glad u said that actually, cause i wasnt sure, so I will change, Ta
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