I can't handle it,
How seeing you can make me,
Itch.
How is it that you,
Make me feel how I do,
Make me hate the air I have to breathe,
Turning to nightmares what once were dreams?
I just can't stand,
You and,
Your silky sweet,
Toxicity.
Kissing you is like a drug,
And touching you is just too much,
I can't keep my breathing in check,
When you kiss my lips and nip my neck.
I can't think when,
You're around,
But then,
I almost don't really want to,
Don't need to when I'm with you.
I love holding your hand,
Being with you and,
Your silky sweet,
Toxicity.
It's repulsing when I'm close,
To you but I know,
Your arms are what I crave,
Your name, my heart engraved,
Upon, the scars healed but there,
A mark of your love so,
Rare.
Love, something you can't give,
Like without,
Me,
You can't live.
I just can't stand,
You and,
Your silky sweet,
Toxicity.
Our feelings arn't something,
To be described as lust or need,
We can't,
Seem to walk hand in hand,
But when we're alone,
Your arms are like home,
You'll kiss my tears away,
Laugh at me and,
Say,
"Be mine forever,"
A bond that can't be severed,
My hero, lover, friend,
My wings to fly me,
To "The End".
We walk hand in hand,
Me and you and,
Your silky sweet,
Toxicity.
Author notes
i really actually liked this one alot. hope its what you were looking for. <3
oops, lol:
kage-saumas-girl
A contest entry
- MAKE ME FEEL by Cena-of-Destiny.
2750 points, ended October 17, 2008, 45 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Intense and felt great to read. add your name to the author notes though, i dont want to dq you for something dumb. i felt everythinng in this poem, gave me shivers and smiles. i didnt like the commas, they seem out of place and break it up too much, but maybe thats your style. idk. this is really great though. good luck in my contest!
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Cena-of-Destiny
oops, thanks so much for telling me. I thought it was in there; i guess i really need to double check, huh?
Yeah, the outta place commas are kinda my style, lol. i'm gld you liked the rest of the poem though. ^.^
<3 Kage's-girl.
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Kage
I'm glad I went back for a look at you- this is an intense, powerful write. Only things is, go back and fix 'almost' (third stanza). I couldn't take my eyes off this until I'd read it the third time. The disjointed structure worked; I don't know how to say it, but combined with the words and the repetition and emotion it just holds attention. WOW, babe...
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thejollytinker
Woops, XD sorry, I kept over-looking almost until you pointed out that mistake. >.> But thanks for telling me, I really hate spelling errors (unless intentional) in my poems.
<3 thanks so much for the applause and the comment. -^.^- I'm really glad you liked it.
<3 Kage
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