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At the Bottom of the Well

"Lucky Penny,"
they call me.

Yeah, right.
I say--

You’re only lucky if you’re the one
doing the throwing,

Not the one at the bottom of the well.

As I look up,

through waters as thick as my aspirations;
one thought becomes impossible to dispel,

--and furthermore I feel I've been left here to rot--

your dreams have come true,
mine have not.

Please tell me what you think

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  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    May 4

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    Interesting. sounds as if you feel like your suffocating in life's games. This is what I got from the poem. I like it very much it was well written. Thank you for sharing.


  • OxymoronishGenuis
    April 27

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    wow..
    this is so interesting
    i love your take..
    i think the penny represents something, metaphoric..
    but even if not its still wonderful..
    nice work


  • McRae by nature
    January 1

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    This is really great. I absolutely love a good personification. I think inanimate objects only get a chance to live through our words, it is amazing.

    Carrie


    • starrynight3636
      January 1
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      Thank you so much. You are the first to respond to this poem, and I hope not the last. I'm kind of fond of it. I really enjoyed your work as well.