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Gettysburg

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 Do you see a Doric temple rise from faint mists of early day?

The huge pedestal and seat gleam white in glare of pure marble.
What determined its weightiness sculpted of things past, solidified through time?

The demigod sits in grandeur; gazes out over his world.
The face is austere and august; hair, tousled; beard, trim;
jaw, set ; cheek, hollowed; one hand outstretched, firmly moulded
to his chair-arm; the other, clenched. The Colossus overawes those beneath it;
albeit peaceful and stately.

 

A bus crowd jostles and wedges, afternooning for their tourist albums.

In face of unseemliness, you turn aside. A vision rises before your set eyes,

smelling of sweat, leather and train carriage tobacco.

Dressed in black suit, tall hat and great coat, the phantom fumbles his notes.
A chosen orator begins, proceeds for two hours then, blessedly, a hymn.

The black figure steps forward and in light, clear voice delivers

that famed dedication to war dead. Bonneted ladies shuffle shoes,

gentlemen stare down at theirs.

 

He has failed them in fewer than three minutes!

You tell of finely crafted phrases the press has misjudged,
the gathering has not digested but spat out as drivel.
I hear you catalogue the sculpted steps climbing through generations

of humanity, construct for me a true edifice, weathering all seasons and ages:
It is for us living to be dedicated here …
for these honoured dead we take increased devotion ....’


The paring of language into meaning humbles.
‘ Under God (we) shall have a new birth of freedom.
… that Government of the people, by the people
for the people shall not perish from the earth.’

 

Look in your pocket,’ says a friend, ‘the crafted
work of stature lies on a leaflet, torn and crumpled.

 

There, I find a truth: the worded statute of liberty.

Author notes

Reference to the first Republican Statesman. Prompt: Write on a "true" Republican in 30 lines or fewer.

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  • ecrivain01
    October 1, 2008

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    I seem ...

    to have acquired a virus. It won't let me respond to your comments. I judge based on the best poem, not on who wrote it.


    • Lyndon gold member
      October 13, 2008
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      Thank you ever so much, Jim.

      You should be rid of the virus now.

      • ecrivain01
        October 13, 2008
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        A computer virus ...

        not one that affects human beings.

        However I'm not here much as I don't feel up to writing or reading poetry either just now.


  • catz Moderators member
    September 20, 2008

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    You've paid our beloved President Lincoln a meaningful compliment with this nice poem. I think he must be turning over in his grave at the state of things now.

    Your poem brings to our attention the greatness of this man, his strength and love of country and mankind.

    A superb write

    Dee


    • Lyndon gold member
      September 27, 2008
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      Thank you, Dee.

      His words and actions belong to democratic (in the true sense) posterity.


  • Sandal
    September 16, 2008

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    "Men may little note, nor long remember" proved to be false, as these words are engraved in the monument you describe. Is his name a secret in this contest?
    Both of the speeches recorded there move me to tears whenever I read them. This president was not just a politician, he was a leader and a humanist. The last line is a fresh thought.
    Your poem sets the scene beautifully, I enjoyed reading. You want a fault? The italics in the last stanza are not consistent.


    • Lyndon gold member
      September 16, 2008
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      So they were, Sandy.

      But not now. Thank you.

  • ecrivain01
    September 16, 2008
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    Yes ...

    he was a great Republican. I'm sure he's spinning in his grave like a top at what these parasites have done to his beloved country.


    • Lyndon gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Jim

      There were only four to bite the bullet. Yet, I am still proud, mate. Thank you for the golden orb.

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